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(TED Summary) Robot that "show emotion"


AK354 7 / 8 1  
Nov 30, 2016   #1
David Hanson as a robotic designer who has opportunity to shows his invention. He present a video to introduced a robot which has truly emotion like human. It can give various expression like smile, angry, and sad. It also can responded and recognized people surrounding. Although, there are many developed to make robot like that. He believe in the future, robot will has ability to understand your speech and feeling, and even can make relationship with human.

Holt [Contributor] - / 7,666 2036  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Alfin, your essay is constantly changing from present to past to present tense. That really makes it very hard to read because you do not have an accurate timeline reference for the reader to go by. Since you have already viewed the video and are writing the summary, you must completely use the past tense references throughout the summary statement. By the way, the statement could be longer and more informative if you had opted to take more notes regarding the presentation.

I just can't let the grammar problems of your essay go at this point because I know that you have failed the grammar range and accuracy portion of this test. Please allow me to clean up the last sentence of your paragraph because that is the most problematic sentence in your statement. So, for you for your future reference:

He has indicated that the future versions of the robot will have the ability for speech and feel recognition, as well as creating relationships with humans.
ifraanisa05 44 / 70 6  
Dec 1, 2016   #3
Hi, here are my thoughts

... designer who has an opportunity to showsshow his invention.

He presentpresents a video (...) which has trulytrue emotion like human.

It also can respondedrespond and recognizedrecognise people surrounding.

Although, there are many developed (......) missing noun

to make a robot like that.

He believebelieves in the future, robot will hashave ability to understand ...
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Dec 1, 2016   #4
Hello David!
Allow me to give you some suggestions.

I think you want to make a complex sentence here but I think it doesn't complete. Notice also that there are two Subject-Verb combinations. This will always be the case with complex sentences as there are two clauses.

You should write like this.
David Hanson as (...) his invention present a video to introduced a robot which has truly emotion like human.
Or change it into common sentence (s+v):
David Hanson as a robotic designer has opportunity to shows his invention,

It can give various expression such as smile, angry, and sad.

It also can responded and recognized people surrounding.

Remember modals + v1

... many developed ways to make robot like that.

Hope it helps you :)
NinaJoesuf25 36 / 66 4  
Dec 1, 2016   #5
... designer who hashad opportunity to showsshow his invention. He presentpresented a video to introducedfor introducing a robot which hashad truly emotion like human. It can give various expressionexpressions like smile, angry, and sad' feelings . It also can respondedrespond and recognizedrecognizeto people surrounding.

... many developed (developed what?) to make robot like that. He believed in the future, robot will has an ability to (...) and feeling, and even can . What's more it can make relationship with human.
nda18 46 / 81 9  
Dec 1, 2016   #6
hi alfin, these are my thought towards your summary

David Hanson, as a (...) show his invention, presented a video to introduced a robot having true emotion like humans . The robot can give various facial expressions such as smile (happiness) , anger and sadness . It also can response and recognized people surrounding it . Although there are many development in order to make the robot like that . David believe that in the future, this robot will has an ability to understand human speech and (...) can make a relationship with human.

Thank you


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