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TED Summary - My Seven Species of robot - Dennis Hong


Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
My Seven Species of robot - Dennis Hong

Dennis Hong is the chairman of Romela, the robotic company in the USA and they have large quantities of rewards from prestige institutions. To run its business, they set 5 effective behaviours while the most powerful secrets are nobody criticises anybody's ideas, nobody critics any opinion. This in absolutely principal because often students fear of they fell uncomfortable to deliver idea or advice. How others likely think about their opinions is always come up in the mind. It effectively impact on students' performance, they have wacky, crazy, brilliant idea which has never been existence. Finally, the whole room is just electrified with creative energy and this is how we develop our ideas. The second secret is to endeavour your robot to overcome current problems. The company is valuable due to its contribution to society and the world.

Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi Abraham, I have some suggests.

It has effectively impact on students' ...

To run the/their business, they set 5 effective

No verb. This is absolutely principal because ...

Keep writing.
alfa7 19 / 26 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
hello Abrahamlincoln, I want you obtain some suggestion from me for your essay,

here we go:

... and they have large of quantities of rewards ...

noun clause about Quantity or Quality should use "of"

To run its business, they set 5 effective behaviours (...) nobody criticises in anybody's ideas, nobody critics any opinion.

please use "in" "on" or "at" to more explain your meaning.

... they have wacky, crazy, and brilliant idea which has ...
The second secret is to endeavour your ...

finally and ultimately use as conclution in your essay, please use it on last sentence.

note: keep writing and go ahead.
rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 29, 2016   #4
hi..
I have some suggestions for you..

This in[is] absolutely principal because often students [are] [often] fear of they fell uncomfortable [feeling] to deliver idea or advice.

I hope it helps..


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