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My summary task about social Networking


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Sep 1, 2016   #1
Recently, The popularity of a social networking on the internet has rapidly risen throughout the world. The social networking facilitates many people to share their personal information created by community. The data shows that three-fourths of the internet users operate the social networking among the people of all the ages. The super popularity of the social networking gives advantage and disadvantage to users. The upside is to ease to connect with friends, relatives and old friends. The entrepreneurs as well use it to run their enterprise, to find out the job vacancy, or to look for a new client. The internet eradicates the need of the space and direct communication. On the other hand, the damages of the social networking have risen. It has some potential risks like most people spend immense time with their online friend causing less time with their local community. The Adolescents have been influenced easily. The social networking will affect our social life.

aidafitria18 9 / 14 1  
Sep 1, 2016   #2
... to share their personal information which created by community. The data shows that three-fourths of the internet users ...
dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Sep 2, 2016   #3
Hi Aris!

Thethe popularity of a social networking ...

among the people of all the ages.

The super popularity => The famous reputation

The entrepreneurs as wellcan use it to run their enterprise,

NB : you should add the table/graphic data, so we can correct your answer
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Sep 2, 2016   #4
hi..

Recently, the popularity of a social networking on the internet has rapidly risen throughout the world.
The socialit networking facilitates manymost people to share their personal information created byto community.

The datachart/table/diagram shows hat three-fourths of ...

The super The most popularity of the social networking gives ...

The upside is to ease to connect with friends, ...
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Sep 2, 2016   #5
Hi Aris,

- The social networking facilitates which many people use to share their personal ...
- ... among the people of all the ages
- The superhigh popularity of the social ...

Hopefully it helps.
hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Sep 2, 2016   #6
Hello, you only have a little grammatical error.
I hope its help you. Thank you

... the social networking among the people of all the ages.

... networking gives advantage and disadvantage to usersyou can paraphrase it becomes (applier). . Avoid similar words.

The upside is to ease to connect with friends, ...

IT IS BETTER TO MAKE TWO PARAGRAPH.

Keep writing.
Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Sep 3, 2016   #7
Recently,it is to common/old style . The popularity of a social networking ...

... the social networking gives advantage and disadvantage merid and demerit to users appliers.

i love your essay since you have structured your essay well. i just put alternative vocabulary to vary your essay.
rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Sep 4, 2016   #8
- The the popularity of a social networking

- The upside is to ease to connect with friends, ...

keep writing mr benten !!
Qaranew52 - / 2  
Sep 16, 2016   #9
Hay aris, my i will give you some suggestion

Original sentences : - the popularity of a social networking
Suggestion :- The popularity of a social networking

happy writing mr mamals!


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