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TED Summary: Why we Need to Talk About Depression by Kevin Breel


Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Oct 4, 2016   #1
Kevin Breel, is a person who suffering depression about 6 years. He said that many people have a misconception about depression, depression is not about sad about didn't get a job which is a natural emotion. The real depression is being sad when everything seems to be alright. And every 30 second someone commits suicide because of depression.

Many people do not care about people who suffering mental illness instead of physical disease. And depression is not a kind of disease which is cured and gain absolutely health, you must spend many years to deal with depression and it is not easy. Many people think depression are cured by itself because of misconception about depression and ironically, depression is the most common mental problem but the least discussed. The first thing that people can do about depression is to vanish the silence and intolerance.

sinahector 7 / 34  
Oct 4, 2016   #2
Hi

who is suffering from depression about 6 years (a better sentence is: who has suffered from depression for about 6 years)
depression is not about sadnessabout
who suffering from mental illness
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Oct 4, 2016   #3
Hi Yonathan,

Kevin Breel, is a person who is suffering from depression for about 6 years. ... depression is not about sad aboutordiddon't get a job which ...

And every 30 secondS someone commits suicide ...
... not care about people who are suffering from mental illness instead ...
... not a kind of disease which iscan be cured and gain absolutely ...
... misconception about depression. and Ironically, depression is (...) but the least to be discussed.
... people can do about depression is to vanishby demolishing the silence and intolerance.

Hopefully it helps.
Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Oct 23, 2016   #4
Hi Yonathan
Here some suggestions for your writing

Kevin Breel, is a person who ... (you do not need to add comma)

not about sad about didn't get a job of being an unemployee ...

to be alright. ,and every 30 seconds someone commits ...

depression are is cured by itself

PS : Improve your understanding about tenses
arrange your sentences well since your summary above is still confusing

Best Regard
dils 20 / 33 2  
Oct 31, 2016   #5
Hi Jojo,

Here some suggestions for you.

Kevin Breel, is a person who suffering from depression about 6 years. He saidstated that many people ...

depression is not about sadness,it isabout didn't get a job, and thiswhich is a natural emotion.

AndIn every 30 second ...

And depression is not a kind of disease which isbe cured andgainto getabsolutely health,...

Good luck


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