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SUMMARY TED 1, CLIMATE CRISIS - ALGORE; he urges the society to decrease the bad effects of it.


rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Aug 26, 2016   #1
Summary TED 1

Climate Crisis
Algore the speaker of TED talked about climate crisis to the audience in California. He urges the society to decrease the bad effects of climate crisis to save the earth. The climate crisis is actually climate collapse, where the causes are the increase of air pollution, inefficient energy utilization and improper usage of electricity. In point of fact, there are more air pollutions from the buildings than the vehicles. If there is no any action to compress the damage of every single factor, the energy of the earth will ease off. What actually the people can do to pull together to preserve this planet is reduce emission in home or vehicle, like buy green electricity and buy a hybrid, bike or others, be a green consumer and chose something with harsh less effect, and the easiest method is to become the catalyst and promote the steps to diminish the defection.
ibal28 20 / 30 5  
Aug 26, 2016   #2
hi

rosadesiana

===> to make a good sentence, you need to use appositive.
eg. Algore, speaker of TEDtalk video, lecture an interesting topic regarding Climate crisis

He urges 0]ARGUES That the society CONDUCT A CONCERTED EFFORT to decrease the bad effects DIRE CONSEQUENCE of climate crisis to save the earth.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 26, 2016   #3
Hi Rosa..
Welcome to Essay Forum. In fact, I am delighted to tell that you have been a right medium to improve your skill. Hopefully, you harness this as well as possible.

Well, in this moment, let me help you to finalize your summary. These below are my corrections. Make you sure that you meet them totally.


He urges ENCOURAGED the society to decrease the bad DETRIMENTAL effects of climate ...
... where the causes are the AN increase of air pollution, ...
If there is HAS BEEN no any action to compress DEAL WITH the damage of every...
... to preserve this planet is reduce REDUCING emissionS in home or vehicle, like buy PURCHASING green electricity and buy a hybrid, bike or others, be a green consumer and chose CHOOSING something with harsh less THE effect, and the easiest (...) and promote the steps to diminish the defection.

Note:
Please, pay attention to:
1. The meaning of your sentences. What you write has the same meaning with what you mind.
2. Use of the article (A/AN/The)
3. Use of the tenses.
4. Using proper linking words.

I believe you will show the better progress on condition that you wanna practice again and again
I am looking forward to meeting the next summary
happy writing
Good Luck...
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Qara52 1 / 1  
Sep 2, 2016   #4
climate crisis or the climate crisis ??
chose or choosing?
thx miss ocaaaaaaaaaa.. happy writing


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