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Summary = Three parent baby success could see trials in two years


Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Aug 22, 2016   #1
newscientist.com/article/2093203-three-parent-baby-success-could-see-trials-in-two-years/

The article written by Andy Coghlan elaborates about the successful experiment toward "three-parent" gene fertility treatment. The treatment goal is to contrive healthy embryos in hereditary mitochondrial disease patient. Healthy mitochondria is a predominant aspect to ensure human's life cells working appropriate. The defective mitochondria, on the other hand, creates a great deal of degenerative disorders. It remains in the body of egg which is stored in the nucleus. Researcher by using "three-parent" treatment removes the nucleus and transfers it into a healthy mitochondria egg from donor. The treatment has been test for several times to ensure safety procedure. In earlier experiment, Turnbull's team as a mitochondria researcher have a tendency to deal with the residues of mother's egg fluid due to extracted procedure. Subsequently, the extracted procedure has been repaired by using chemical solution manipulation to minimize the number of faulty mitochondria carried over. Team also succeed to increase the survival rate of embryos by using faster time after fertilization.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Aug 22, 2016   #2
Hi Sofi, the detailed descriptions below are my analysis toward your article summary.

- Healthy mitochondriamitochondrion is a predominant aspect to ensure human's life cells working appropriate.work properly.
- The defective mitochondriamitochondrion , on the other hand, creates... (mitochondria = plural, mitochondrion = singular)
- ResearcherBy using "three-parent" treatment, researcher removes the nucleus and transfers it into...
- The treatment has been tested for several times...
- Turnbull's team as a mitochondria researcher have a tendency to... (tendency is only an INTENTION not an ACTION)(this can make your essay confusing)

- by using the manipulation of chemical solution(I still have no idea about this one, syntactically correct, but I think the meaning is still confusing)chemical solution manipulation to minimize...

There you have it Sofi, mind the appropriate sentence structure to avoid confusion. Clarity is the most important matter that every summary should achieve. Hopefully you can compose a better summary next time. Good luck for that :)


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