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Summary of Video: Wired Happiness


Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 11, 2016   #1
Most citizen in urban society always say "Life to be short to unhappy". Happy is a word that many people search. But actually, the first question is "what do you have to get in order to be happy?". The psychologist research conclude if every people think if I will be happy when I get the good job, when I get the highest salary, when I have marriage, when I have a children, and if I all thing that I want. But after they get all thing that they want they still unhappy. What the problem actually?

Based on the Srikumar Rao as a happiness teacher say, actually we entire life learning to be unhappy. Every person have a mental model. The mental model is habitual wanting that every person leaning unhappy life. According to the Rao suggestion is you must think if outcome is completely outside of your control. Outcome is not guarantee to get happy. So forget about the outcome and focusing the process.

Ashkan123 12 / 33 2  
Aug 11, 2016   #2
Hi
I have just couple comment
1.I would not use But in beginning of sentence. However ,nevertheless are better option.
2. The psychologist research concludeif every people think if I will be happy when I get the good job (...) when I have a children, and if I all thing that I want.

too many If
3. According to the Rao suggestion is, you must think if outcome is completely outside of your control. Outcome is not guarantee to get happy.
4.., So forget about the outcome and focusing the process.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Aug 11, 2016   #3
Hi Nur, below are my suggestions on your summary.

- Most citizens in urban society
- always say "Life is too
- be short to be unhappy".
- HappyHappiness is a word that many people search.
- But actuallyHowever , the first question
- TheA psychologist research
- conclude that if every people
- want. But, but after they get
- all the things that they wanted they're still unhappy.
- It makes you wonder, What is the problem actually ?

- Based on the Srikumar Rao as a happiness teacher say,
- actually we have our entire
- is the habitual wanting
- that every person has in leaning unhappy life. - According to the Rao suggestionit is you - who must think
- if the outcome
- Outcome isdoes not guarantee to get happy. So forget about the outcome and focusingguarantee the process.

There you have it Nur, I hope the above remarks are helpful and for future reference, please focus on your sentence construction as this seem to be your weakest point and practice more often.


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