That incident might be the most embarrassing moment for Popeyes, one of fast-food restaurants in New York City, when a woman named Rosemary Thomas posted photos to Facebook of what a rat head looks like in her daughter's fried chicken. She uploaded the pictures and wrote: "Friends and family, this is a meal Popeyes in Harlem served my daughter, my niece, and sister." She even asked other users to share the pictures of the disgusting dark gray object which has been fried deeply. In contrary to its real service condition, in fact, Popeyes is considered as a 5 rating ready-meal restaurant by department of health.
As response to the incident, Renee Kopowski, a spokeswoman for Popeyes, stated "When things are found they usually turn out to be chicken organs."
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Hi Fitry..
i'd like your topic, it was interesting, but lemme give you some corrections.
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Hey Fitri12
These following corrections are addressed to make your great essay even better :
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... meal Popeyes in Harlem servinged my daughter, my niece, and sister." She even asked other users (you have to specified the which user..? ) to share the pictures ...
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