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(Summary Article) This Is the World's Most Expensive City for Expatriates


AK354 7 / 8 1  
Dec 2, 2016   #1
Recently, The company named Mercer which usually survey about the most expensive city in the world, launched new rank regarding that. They announced that Hongkong as the most expensive city for tourist and immigrant. The living cost in there was tremendous expensive including housing, food and entertainment. The company found that price of coffee in Hongkong approximately $8 twice as much as London ($4.40) and Tokyo ($4.00).

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Dec 2, 2016   #2
Hi Alfin, once again a very short summary essay, well, summaries are not meant to be long, however, the shorter the summary, the higher the risk of understanding is and your readers might not totally understand the idea you are trying to convey and that is not a good summary essay.

Remember, write the essay with the 3 most important parts, the introduction, the body and the conclusion, unless this is not covered, then the essay will not be complete.

Having said that, please find a few modifications below;
- Recently, t he company named Mercer
- which usually surveysabout the most expensive
- city in the world, launched a new rank regarding that .
- The living cost in there was tremendously expensive
- found that the price of coffee in
- Hongkong is approximately $8, twice as much as London ($4.40) and Tokyo ($4.00).

There you have it Alfin, I would love for you to add more proof as to Hongkong being the most expensive place to visit for tourist. Overall, it's a good start and additional information will help strengthen your summary essay.
UQ17 3 / 4  
Dec 7, 2016   #3
hi Alfin

again and again, it is too short summary i think that short summary is well does not matter but should contains much information and main idea can be covered.

this is my advice.

1. ... named Mercer whichIS usually survey about (...), launched new rankregarding that( UNCLEAR SENTENCE.)

2. They announced SHOWN that Hongkong as ...

3. The living cost in there was tremendous expensive ...

4. do not forget use linking verb or conjunction to make flow your writing.


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