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(TED Summary) We are worried about local warming in your laptop


AK354 7 / 8 1  
Dec 2, 2016   #1
Yossi Vardi as a investor and prankster who has presentation about local warming from laptop can disrupt human's fertility particularly very dangerous for male. He initial give information that nowadays most of people only concern about global warming problem and ignore about local warming. Therefore, that problem become essential because numerous people don't know that when they put laptop on leg is harmfull to sexual healthy.

Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Dec 2, 2016   #2
Hi, there are several mistakes in your summary.

1. ... prankster who has presentation( presents) about local warming ...
2.He initial gives(singular/plural problem) information that nowadays ...
3.Therefore, thatthe problem become essential because numerous people don'tdo not know that when (...) leg is harmfullharmful to sexual healthy.

Keep writing!
yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 7, 2016   #3
Hello, this is my correction for you

Yossi Vardi as aan investor (remember that using of a or an, "a" must be followed by vowel letter after "a" article, in the opposite, "an" must be followed by consonant letter after "an" article)

who has presentationpresent(remember that present perfect, after "have or has" must be followed by V3 not V ing)

problem becomebecomes essential because (the subject is problem as singular noun)

leg is harmfullharmful to sexual healthy

thank you


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