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SUMMARYS The colorful propaganda maps in 20 century wars


Bams17 28 / 43  
Oct 4, 2016   #1
The colorful propaganda maps in 20 century wars

Maps made to persuade to the public during war times were funy, attractive and informative. This is occurance during 20 century, every maps has hidden agenda, it is clear to convince to the public that war is must have and they has common enemies. For the example, war map of Rusia created in 1900 by Frederick Rose, British cartographer, this map reveal detils about politics, art and cultur of the countries. The main actor of this map revealed by big octopus with big body and long tentacles reaching out in all directions, strangling Poland, Finland, and China, and reaching toward Turkey, Afghanistan, and Persia. As the result, most european are depicted as victim of Rusia colonialism. In addition, war map can be seen international situation in one picture, and make fast the spread of information in the world. Pople will easy to understand the information but several persons it called propaganda.



Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Oct 4, 2016   #2
Hi bams, I have some advice for you.

Maps is made to persuade (...) times were funn y, attractive and informative.
.., every maps has hidden agenda, (...) that war is must have an object is needed here since "have" is a transitive verb and they has common enemies. For the example, war map of Rusia created ...

Best regard
mem77 62 / 98 6  
Oct 4, 2016   #3
Hello Bams, this is some correction from me. Feel free to correct me too!

Maps made to persuade to........
Maps made persuade to.....

.....the public during war times were funy , attractive and informative.
......the public during war times were funny, attractive and informative.

.....every maps has hidden agenda.....
......every maps have hidden agenda.... or you can use ......every map has hidden agenda....

.....war is must have and they has common enemies.
.....war must have and they have common enemies.

.....this map reveal detils about....
.....this map reveal details about....

Thanks, keep practice!
fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Oct 4, 2016   #4
Helo bams,
Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion

==> Maps made to persuade to the public during war times were funy, attractive and informative( this sentence tend to make me confuse).
==> This is occurance(This occurred or happened) during 20 century, every maps has(was a) hidden agenda,
==> it is clear to convince to the public that war is must have and they has common enemies.(tend to make me confuse)
==> this map reveal detils(details) about politics, art and cultur(e) of the countries.
==> The main actor of this map revealed by (a) big octopus with (a) big body (which has a big body) and long tentacles (to) reaching out in all directions,..

==> ... European are depicted as (the) victim of Rusia colonialism. In addition, war map can be seen (as) international situation in one picture, and make fast the spread of information in the world(tend to make me confuse).

==> Pople will easy to (easily) understand the information but several persons it called propaganda(tend to make me confuse)

Good luck and keep writing :)


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