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superficial is external human" One should never judge a person by external appearance


Dashka 1 / 1  
Jun 29, 2011   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should
never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons
and details to support your answer

Some people judge the person by external appearance. If their person looks like wealthy, strong, young and beautiful people interacting tendency is being different such as flattering, compliment and doing some movement to them showing respect. I cannot be like that I agree never judge a person by external appearance external that could be false and without deep known about the person you couldn't be judge someone. One wise word snake superficial is external human gut is internal. That's why I agree this statement

amrosca 4 / 130  
Jun 29, 2011   #2
Hei there! :D

First of all, welcome to EF! I hope you'll enjoy being part of the community and that you'll find it useful too!

Now regarding your essay. I really think you should expand it. The subject does allow you to develop some good points, so just go ahead and write your opinion down.

I also suggest you try to write short sentences, rather than long and complicated ones. This way you will be less likely to make mistakes and the reader will be able to follow your better.

Towards the ending you also quote a saying or a proverb. I cannot understand what you are referring to, perhaps you could look up a proper translation.

Some people judge thea person by his/her external appearance. If theirthis person looks like a wealthy, strong, young and beautiful individual,people's interacting tendency is being different(/people tend to interact with them differently);

such as flattering, compliment and doing some movement to them showing respect .(/they will try to complement the other person in order to show their respect.)[You could mention body language again in more detail in another paragraph. Also, think about this: Is it really respect we try to show when we complement a person or is it something else?]

I cannot be like that. I agreebelieve that it is never right to judge a person by his/her external appearance(always remember to keep phrases short).external that could be false and without deep known about the person you couldn't be judge someone(/Without knowing one's character, you could make wrong assumptions.). One wise word snake superficial is external human gut is internal(?) . That's(/Those are the reasons) why I agree with this statement.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 30, 2011   #3
One wise word snake superficial is external human gut is internal.

One wise word snake... that caught my attention!

You are a wise word snake indeed.

Well... come up with a few paragraphs of ammunition to use in your argument.
OP Dashka 1 / 1  
Jul 5, 2011   #4
oh thank you i really appreciate that, i have serious English writing problem. also thank you inspiring me


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