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Support the arts or protect the environment? 'stop this massacre of the nature'


juliamedeiross 1 / -  
Oct 21, 2012   #1
A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect thee environment. Which do you think the company should choose?

The human being has been deteriorating the environment for a long time, and nowadays something must be done to stop this massacre of the nature. So, if a company is going to give some money either to support arts or to protect the environment, I think the company should choose to protect the environment as a result of its importance and the fact that people do not live without trees and all those things that nature provides us.

With the evolution of our society and also with the industrial revolution, people started to pollute and degrade the rivers and the near forest from the industries. Time passed by and this is still happening nowadays, and that is why the company should protect the environment. When we pollute a river, for instance, fishes start to die, and also all the animals in it. This has a huge consequence in the food chain. Fishes die, and then birds die, and the animals that eat birds also die, and the sequence follows.

There is also others degradation that humans are provoking. The global warming has been on the television for a long time, and people do not attempt to it; This happens due to the release of carbonic gas and other toxic gases that come out from automobiles and industries. Another aspect to discuss about is the deforestation. In my country, for example, there is the Amazon forest, which is one of the biggest forest in the world and the Amazon river is also the largest and that has more water in it. This forest has been damaged by people who take its trees to produce paper, but when it happens the forest gets smaller and fragile. If we do not do anything about it, the forest is going to end.

For these reason, I think the company should choose to protect the environment. The nature has been damaged a lot and if we do not do something, we will not have the forest and the rivers anymore, and it will also prejudice our healthy and life style; we will probably not leave too long and if the animals are gone, we will not have the steak or anything else to eat. So, that is why the company should choose to support the nature around us.

Thank you :D

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 22, 2012   #2
[quote=juliamedeiross]The humans being hashave been deterioratingdoing lot of damage to the environment for a long time, and nowadays something must be done to stop this massacreharmful effects toof the nature. [/quote

The words "deterirorate" and "massacre" are inappropriately used in this sentence.
Deteriroration is about diminishing quality or getting worse. So it is mostly used in passive voice. For example;
His health got deteriorated over the years.
The acts of humans have caused severe deterioration of environmental conditions.

Also the word massacre means instance killing of large numbers. This word means very close to "slaughter"


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