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The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon


Bams17 28 / 43  
Oct 11, 2016   #1
The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon

Long time ago, the crepy clowns had been appear, fisrt of all the clowns were marginal grouphs society in America. They always funy dressed but they make up the face with freak style. This phenonema not only occur in the USA but also in the several countries. The clowns popular as scary creaturs because their style was very stranger in the society. In the 19 century, the scary clowns popular as criminal. Therefore they are popular as crepy creatures. Spreading of the scary clowns are very rapidly. During the 19 century, they became enemies in the several country. However, After 19 century, condition of clowns became better than the 19 century, Charles Dickens london flokflore member grouph changed of scary clowns became the real clowns. In the 20 century, clowns industrys have been rapidly develop, sighting of scary clown in 20 century are hoaxes. The police had arrests all of scary clowns and right now, the clowns will be favourite entertainment in the USA and in the several countries.

fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Oct 11, 2016   #2
Hello Bams,
Hope you enjoy your time, lemme give you some suggestion

==> (a)(or you can mention Years ago) Long time ago, the cre(e )py clowns had been appear (ing/ed? depend on the time),

==> fis r(s) t of all the clowns were marginal grouph s society in America.
==> They always fun(n)y dressed(tend to make me confuse--> they always dress uniquely)but(and) they make up the(their) face with freak style.

==>Thisphenonema(phenomenon--> singular) not only occur in the USA but also in the several countries.
==> The clowns (were-->past tense) popular as scary creatur(e) s because their style was very stranger in the(among) society.
==> Therefore they are popular as cre(e) py creatures.
==> Spreading of the scary clowns are(is) very rapidly.
==> ... they became enemies in the(among/ between) several country(ies--> several-->plural) .
==>However, After 19 century, (the) condition of clowns became better than the 19 century (before--> you have done mention it),
==> Charles Dickens (L--> capital for place name)l ondon flokflore(folklore) member grouph(this sentence tend to make me confuse)(Charles Dickens is a member of London's folklore group has) changed of scary ..

==>In the 20 century, clowns industry(ie) s have been rapidly ...
The police had arrests(ed--> had need V3) all of (the) scary clowns and right now,
==> ... and in the several countries (later) .

*be aware with plural and singular
*you have done several typos
*your sentence structure sometimes tends to make reader confuse, try to make it easily to understand

Good luck and keep writing :)


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