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The survey in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones

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Aug 27, 2021   #1

why teenagers utilize their phones

The pie charts indicate the survey's result in an African country about the main reasons why teenagers utilize their phones from 2016 to 2019.
Overall, it can be directly observed that social networks and digital cameras witness an upward trend, while email and phone calls tend to decline throughout the 4 year-period.

Looking at the details, both surfing the Internet and digital camera had a slight growth. In 2016, people using phones for social networks accounted for half of the reason, after 4 years, this had climbed to 56% which was a slow growth. Apart from that, the use of digital cameras also experienced the same growth which increased from 15% to 20%, 5% higher compared with the figure at the start of the period.

Turning to the second group, while email had a slow decline, phone calls tend to decrease considerably. The number of users who used phones for emailing in 2016 took up 25% before it dropped minimally to 19% in the last period of the survey. On the other hand, in 2019, the proportion of phone calls accounted for 5% which was three times lower compared with the figure in 2016.
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Aug 28, 2021   #2
The writer indicates the plural form of a pie chart, which is pie CHARTS. However, the information provided does not indicate the number of charts and how the information provided in the summary was divided into the number of charts. How many charts were there? The number of images should have been indicated in the summary, as well as the division of information.

Due to the missing image, I cannot fully review the essay in terms of meeting the prompt requirements. The image and its accompanying information would have provided that clarity for me. Even in the reporting section, the writer did not seperate the pie chart information using topic titles to create a clear separation of data presentations. It is difficult to review this essay because there is an obvious error but the lack of image presentation prevents me from delivering a thorough assessment for the presentation improvement.

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