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A survey about how people in five Australian cities bought their coffee and tea (IELTS 1)

Agnes Yang 1 / -  
Nov 17, 2021   #1
A survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information and make comparisons

The bar chart above demonstrates the proportion of how people in five Australian cities bought their coffee and tea last month.

As to the option of getting coffee or tea at a coffee shop, the percentage of Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart accounts for half of the city residents, and the first three cities were even over 60 percent. The left city, Adelaide, reached about 49 percent, which was also nearly half of the city residents.

For the choice of buying instant coffee, five cities remained in an interval of 45 to 55 percent, while the proportion of Brisbane and Hobart both exceeded 50 percent, which was 53 and 54 percent respectively.

As to the last alternation, purchasing fresh coffee, the percentage of Brisbane reached merely 35 percent, which was the lowest and presented a great gap compared to the former options as well.

In general, despite various percentages, almost five cities present the figure in a similar order. That is, going to a coffee shop for coffee or tea accounts for the most, except for Adelaide shows a slight difference as the first and the second reverse. At the same time, getting fresh coffee is the least preferable option among the residents of the five cities.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,728 4511  
Nov 18, 2021   #2
The bar chart above

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