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Surveys about the quality of workers relationships with their managers and colleagues


Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Nov 3, 2016   #1
The charts below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationship with their supervisors and their co-workers.

The pie charts reveal a comparison the number of workers relationships with managers and colleagues. The data covered those subjects based on the survey in 2005 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that while the statistics for employees say that there were the precise quality rating levels of relations with both bosses and workmates in both years existed. Both statistics were recorded as by far the greatest ratio. In any case, the modest rose slightly in both classifications were indicated over the balance of the two years.

According to the data, the quality of relations between employees and the bosses did not illustrate great variations in ratio since the beginning of survey. In 2005, 61 percent of staff members admitted that they had perfect relations with their managers. After that, this percentage rose sharply by 4 percent in 2009. More than a fifth of employees from the total people who abreast of survey in both years report their relations with managers so good, which was the second biggest classifications. A very small number or workers at under 10 percent argued that their relationships with bosses was delicate.

Moving to another surveys that related to colleagues affiliation, there was a few different numbers of very good category with workmates. Between 2005 and 2009, it rose gradually from 63 to 70 percent. The category of good in 2005 almost as equal as in 2009, which was from 28 to 25 percent particularly. All of the other categories only shown a small percentage of relations between workers and workmate at under 10 percent in both of period.


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ReskiRamadani88 43 / 57 5  
Nov 3, 2016   #2
Hello i will give you suggestion:

Actually, your conclusion make me confuse. i think you must make it clear . Be careful with you sentence and make it connected with your introduction : "The pie charts reveal a comparison the number of workers relationships with managers and colleagues"
WasishaSisha 16 / 20  
Nov 3, 2016   #3
Hi wilyaftika23,

At the first sight, your writing task 1 is TOO LONG. It's over 250 words.

... of workers relationships with(BETWEEN) managers and colleagues.

The data covered those subjects based ... ---> it still utilizes present tense and verb 1

... the statistics for employees say that there were ... ---> you have to start your overview with past tense, it had already occurred in 2009.

... relationships with bosses was delicate. ---> it should be verb 2, because it needs past tense.

Moving to another surveys that related to ... ---> another + singular noun

there was a few different numbers ...---> it should be "were + plural noun"

Keep writing!


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