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Susan Chain - What the introvert's Advantages From The Other Types


FirmanRomadhon20 9 / 15  
Sep 17, 2016   #1
People have different personallity who make them to be unique, but if this is looked at by personality types, there are three kinds of personality; introvert, extrovert and ambievert. Susan chain is the speaker in the video who has introvert personality. She told that introvert's people often experienced discrimination such as in office, school, university, and so on.

Surely, it occurs caused by the characteristic of introvert person. Introvert always have distinction way to do something, they enjoy to spend their time for studying or working by theirselves. An introvert can not do something in a crowded situation or in front of public, they prefer to be alone in a quiet place. It should be not happening, because Susan said that we still needed introvert in our life. Actually Introverts have primacy into leardership capacity from the other kinds. It is such managing capacity to make intencity relationship with the other people deeply.
fadhilmd25 41 / 75 11  
Sep 17, 2016   #2
Dear Firman, here are some advices for you,

People have different personallity who make them to be unique --> personality, become unique

personality --> personalities

discrimination such as --> discrimination, such as, (Comas)

hope it help to improve your writing,

regards
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 17, 2016   #3
Dear firmanromadhon, it's a nice writing. However, here is a few small things to be paid more attention.

Surely, it occurs caused by....
You only have to use one verb in one sentence which has no conjunction. So, "it occurs" or "it is caused by".....

they enjoy to spend their time for studying or working by theirselves[themselves] ťťobject of prep
An introvert can not[cannot] ťťwithout space

Wish it useful. Best regard
Jawa 11 / 17 1  
Sep 17, 2016   #4
hii.. Mr. Firman
let me try to correct some sentences

... discrimination such as in office, school, university, and so on(you have to give a detailed explanation)

Introvert always have distinction ......

you need to pay more attention on your subject verb agreement

An introvert can not do something (...) or in front of public, they(you need to think which one do you refer, singular or plural, as you refer to an introvert) prefer to be alone...

hope this helps,
thanks
Jawa


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