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[IELTS TASK 1] - Table: The amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries.

nhinhi123 1 / 1  
Mar 26, 2019   #1
Hello everyone, could you give me some comments and probably the score of it? Thanks in advance!
Because I can't post an image here so I give a link below.

support in US dollars for technology in developing countries

Topic: the table shows the amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries by charities in the US, EU and other countries from 2006 to 2010.

The given graph illustrates how much money US, EU and other countries support technology of developing countries between 2006 and 2010 in term of billions USD.

Overall, money from these countries aiding to technological development was increased. Also, the figure for US was the highest during the period shown.

In 2006, the amount of money given in the technology aid of US was 9.7 billion USD. Over the next four years, there was a significant growth in the figure for US and reaching its peak of 22.7 billion in 2010. During the period shown, the total money donation of 2010 was 30 billion USD, which was nearly two times as much as that of 2006.

Meanwhile, the donations of EU and other countries were similar and steadily increased from 2006 to 2008. In 2009, however, the level of technological aid of other contries considerably decreased to 2.6 billion. Moreover, the figure for EU countries also slightly dropped to 3.7 billion USD in 2009 before going up to 4.0 billion in the last.

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coke 14 / 28 13  
Mar 26, 2019   #2
Hello nhinhi123

Your structure is similar to the one given on ieltsmaterial so overall, the information breakdown is sufficient.
You should pay attention to minor spelling and word choice. For example, 'in TERMS of billions USD'.

If you noticed, the amount of financial support from the US not only was the highest throughout the period but also increased substantially and rapidly compared to the money from the other groups of countries.

There was a slight drop in the donation of EU countries in 2009 that you can also mention.

I think your writing is worth a good band score. Keep up the good work.
OP nhinhi123 1 / 1  
Mar 27, 2019   #3
@coke thanks a lot. You advices are really useful for me <3

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