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Ielts writing task 1 - Table - Average rainfall in two cities

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Nov 12, 2020   #1

the amounts of rain in Woodsville and Blacksboro

The given table provides information on the average precipitation in 12 months of the year in Woodsville and Blacksboro.

Overall, it is clear that Woodsville has higher average rainfall level than Blacksboro does. Additionally, the driest month of both cities is July.

Woodsville receives a relatively high rainfall record in January (5 inches). The figure then decreases gradually until July when it bottoms at the value of 0.75 inches. After that, the last 5 months witness a considerable rise in rainfall level with the highest records in November and December (6 and 5 inches, respectively).

In Blacksboro, the rainiest months of the year are January and February with the average precipitation of 3 and 4 inches. Similar to Woodsville, the city enters dry season in the next 5 months and the rain level in July is measured just 0.01 inches. Then the figure grows slightly till the end of the year with the measurement of 2.5 inches in December.

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Nov 12, 2020   #2
You have not changed enough of the keywords from the original discussion instructions for your presentation to not be considered a cut and paste or memorized presentation. You need to learn about word equivalents that you can use for the image reference (chart instead of table). You also forgot to mention that the measurement was done for cities. You cannot just present the location, you have to explain what sort of information that represents as well.

The summary overview also lacks a reference to the given measurement type prior to presenting it in the actual report or trending statement. The measurement should be given its own presentation spot in the summary overview to create a full summary of the detailed information presented.

There were certain parts of the report where the given data is the same for both cities yet you failed to present those as points of similarity in the essay. Where information is the same or overlaps, those need to be presented as unique discussion points. You should have presented that both cities had the same amount of rainfall in February as represented by 4 inches of rain, a common point for the two cities that often diverge in rainfall information. The lack of that presentation implies that you did not really analyze the image. Which is why you failed to present the most obvious similar point in the chart.

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