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The table compares the leading mobile phone producers in terms of their international market share


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Sep 5, 2020   #1

The worldwide market share of the mobile phone market



The table compares the leading mobile phone producers in terms of their international market share between 2005 and 2006.

Overall, Nokia is the leading manufacturer with the highest percentage of market share in the years 2005 and 2006. While the proportion of market share of Nokia, Motorola, Sony Ericsson increased over the period, that of the remaining companies fell.

Nokia had the largest percentage of market share in both years, which increased from 32.5% in 2005 to 35% in 2006. Its nearest competitor, the figures for Motorola saw a significant rise from 17.7% to 21.1% during the period. Sony Ericsson also increased its sales by 1.1% from 6.3% in 2005 to 7.4% in 2006.

By contrast, the global market share of BenQ Mobile was the lowest, 4,9% in 2005 and 2.4% in 2006. Samsung sales also declined, from 12.7% to 11.8% throughout the period. The market share of LG fell to 6.3%, the decline of just 0.1% from the previous year. Finally, the percentage of market share of others mobile phone manufacturers decreased by 3%, from 19.2% in 2005 to 16.2% in 2006.



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Sep 5, 2020   #2
Your summary overview still feels too similar to the original presentation. Next time, try flipping the information around to make it seem less like a cut and paste job. Say the years first, the topic, and then to image type. Sometimes, flipping the sentence content even helps your TA score because you totally change the presentation from the original. Overall, you did not do a bad job with your comparison presentation. Your clarity is evident and your analytical considerations are front and center in your presentation. However, you forgot to indicate that the figures you will be presenting comprises 100 % of the market share as per table indicators.


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