IELTS TASK 1: TABLE OF JOB SKILL - a questionnaire answers

The table describes the proportion of the worker's questionnaire answer about the main skill in their professions, in 1997 and 2006. Overall, during the period, many employees determine dealing with people skill are the most important accomplishment to have, while making speeches or presentations is considered as non-priority expertise.

There was a slight rose of around 1% to 4% in some categories, such as planning the activities of others, advising or caring for costumers or clients and making speeches or presentation. A higher increment rate was experienced by dealing with, instructing or training, and persuading or influencing others which stood at 60%, 25%, and 16% in 1997, then grew to 65%, 30% and 21% in 2006, all respectively.

In 2006, most laborers decided owning knowledge, cooperative analyzing and listening others as their priority skillful management. It is evidenced by there was a enormously improvement of 6% to 9% in those dexterity. When it comes to the capability to sell a product, some workers no longer found it as important as in previous year.

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a high increment rate was experienced by some aspects such as ...

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