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The table shows information and predictions regarding the changes in percentage of the population



potatogoubi 1 / -  
Oct 5, 2024   #1
The given table illustrates details and predicts the change in the number of citizens of 65 and about in Canada, Germany and UK in three different years.
As can be seen from the table, in 1988 and 2000, the proportion of 65 and over 65 people in Germany is the highest while the UK is opposite. By the year 2030, it is predicted that both 3 countries will witness a similar growth in percentage by 5 to 6 percent.
From 1988 to 2000, the growth in percentage of senior in Germany is considerable, from 20,45 to 25,32 meanwhile old English citizens witness a minimal grow of under 1 percent. Compare to Canadian, the raise of people is far more stable.
In 2030, it is hoped that German elderly still highest and UK will be in contrast. However by this year, Englis is predicted to have a significant growth to more than 5 percent.Canada and Germany has the same rate in growing population.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15439  
Oct 10, 2024   #2
While the summary overview meets the 2 sentence minimum requirement, it is missing the trending sentence, which would have completed the presentation. The paragraph does not present the complete preliminary information as required by the scoring system.

Always format the page properly by leaving a space between paragraphs. That will help to differentiate between the presentation sets and also, make it easier for the reader to scan the information you have provided.

It is important that you remember not to reference the image in any way that will force the reader to refer to the image to validate your information. The expectation is that you can do that without having the image reference, which the reader does not have access to.
strawberrymilk 2 / 2  
Oct 10, 2024   #3
Hi,
Your content is very clear, however I would double check formatting and grammar/spelling mistakes as they are easy to miss, which is especially important if you are writing the IELTS (e.g. Compared to Canadians, the rise of elderly people/senior citizens are far more stable.)

Good job and best of luck!
Momovich 1 / 1  
Oct 11, 2024   #4
Hello
Your essay is very similar to mine when I did the IELTS test. I had 7.5 on my writing and I'm sure you can have better points!


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