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IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010


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Feb 26, 2021   #1

vehicles in Australia STATISTICS



The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table illustrates how the registration of five different vehicle types between 2010 and 2014 and the overall percentage growth.

It is clear that the number of all five kinds of vehicles registered was on the increase over the period of four-years. In addition, the figure for passenger vehicles was the highest while the biggest growth could be seen in the number of registered motorcycles.

In 2010, passenger vehicles has the highest number of registration, at 11 million, compared to commercial vehicles and motorcycles, at 2.3 million and 570,000 respectively. By 2014, the figure for passenger vehicles rose 18.2% to reach 13 million and was the highest over the given period, while the runner-up, commercial vehicles, rose 17.4% to reach 2.7 million in 2014. Meanwhile, the number of registered motorcycles saw the biggest growth, at 30.7%, from 570,000 to 745,000.

The figures for light and heavy trucks also increased over the measured period, with heavy trucks rising 10.2%, from 384,000 to 423,000, and light trucks rising 23.5%, from 106,000 to 131,000.



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Feb 26, 2021   #2
The presentation shows percentage of change, not percentage of growth. Your reference is incorrect. It should have been restated as "overall measurement variations in percentages" or something similar. A quick run down of the 5 vehicle types was also in order since this is part of the overview information. It would have been a helpful reference and strong supporting information for the trending statement.

The last sentence in the presentation can be better improved for clarity purposes by dividing it into individual sentences. The information would be clearer to the reader if you presented it as:

The figures for light and heavy trucks also increased over the measured period. Heavy trucks rose to 10.2%, from 384,000 to 423,000. Light trucks increased at a rate of 23.5%, from 106,000 to 131,000.

Avoid run-on presentations as these tend to confuse the information being presented. It becomes more difficult to follow when there are no clear demarcations in the presentation. In fact, all of the paragraphs could have been helped by better information division in the presentations. However, I am unable to show you more than one example for that in this post because showing you those changes would require me to basically rewrite the whole essay, which I am not permitted to do.


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