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What would it take for you to consider your life succesful?


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Oct 7, 2015   #1
When you look back on your life in 30 years, what would it take for you to consider your life successful? What relationships or accomplishments will be important on this journey?

The greatest accomplishments cannot be boiled down to a single moment instead they are evidence of how a life is lived. Bessie Stanley wrote, "He has achieved success who has lived well, laughed often and loved much." I agree with her philosophy and ultimately that is the lens that I will measure how successful I have been in my life.

Saying that one needs to live well is vague but fitting. For each person living well means something different. I am driven and in order for me to consider my life a life well lived I have to accomplish the goals that I have set. I want a life where I set out a plan of what will make me successful that day, week, or year and go through with it. There is great satisfaction in the struggle of working hard towards a goal and then being able to finish it. In thirty years I want to look back at my goals and see that I was determined to earn my successes and happiness, that I graduated from college, worked doing my dream job, made the difference in other's lives, and continually learned. Another aspect of my perception of living well is being able to follow my heart and be myself. I will have to continually learn more about myself as well as like and accept myself. For me, living well means keep making progress in life and yet to be happy with who I am and where I'm at in life.

Laughter is a way to strengthen relationships, relax, and simply enjoy yourself! Everyone enjoys the company of another person who can see the humor of a situation and make them laugh. Humor is a quality of perception that enables us to experience joy even when faced with adversity. Our sense of humor gives us the ability to find delight and to release tension. The best part of laughing often is it brings a smile to my face and brings joy to my life.

Relationships help us understand who we are therefore having loving relationships is critical for a successful life. Having close-knit relationships gives me a positive way to define myself as a daughter, sister, friend and thirty years down the road also as a teacher, mentor, mother and a wife. When giving love in these different roles it can help people in their own endeavors to more fully embrace who they are and get through the day. I want to be the person to help someone find their passion, pick them up when they are getting down, and help lead them onto the path where they will consider themselves successful. As people have positively impacted my life I want to give love back to them and to society.

When I look back on my life I want to see that I have been happy. My greatest accomplishments will not be about what I have instead they will be about who I am: someone who is happy, someone who laughs often and someone who loves and is loved.

vangiespen - / 4,140 1449  
Oct 7, 2015   #2
Anna, I can understand why you would like to remain so vague about your ideal life and accomplishments over the next 30 years. After all, nobody can really predict who and what we will be by then. Nobody really knows what the future holds for us. But the vagueness of your answer in the essay, in my opinion, does not really offer an acceptable answer to to the prompt.

When you are applying for college admission, it is always best to represent yourself in a positive manner when asked. More importantly, you should answer each questions with specifics instead of Buddha-like vagueness. When the reviewer looks at your paper, the first think he will ask himself is, "Does this student have the confidence to look forward in time? Does he have the ability to plan his future?" By responding with specifics, you at least let the reviewer know that you do have a life plan for the next 30 years. Whether that life plan changes or not in the future, what is important is that you have an idea of where you want to be and how to achieve it.

That is why the essay asks you to consider how successful you might be in the future and who might be able to help you along the way to that dream. Think about your plans for after college. What is your plan? Get a job, work, achieve success, start a family, take a masters degree, etc. All of those things are part of your 30 year plan. The question is, how do you think you will achieve that? Will your family be able to help you? Any masters degree you plan to complete in the future? In which school? Those will be some of the people who will help you become more successful in your life. These are all plans that you can achieve within 30 years. These are all part of the full picture that will help you consider yourself successful.

In my opinion, you need to analyze your response and redirect it towards more specific responses. I believe that the specifics will better help the reviewer to get to know you as a potential student and successful person.


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