While this may be true to some extent, I am leaning towards the far-fetching benefits of leveraging technology advancements.
The discussion question is, "To what extent do you agree or disagree?" not, "Is the statement somewhat true and why?" The response you have provided may seem to align with the prompt question but, it actually does not. You have to first, respond to the prompt based on the prescribed format (extent) and second, provide the reason for your opinion (thesis statement). What you provided regarding the far reaching benefits would have been the perfect discussion reason to support the opinion response in a proper format.
The reasoning paragraphs are focused on technological use in terms of the workplace and manufacturing. The discussion was supposed to be directed towards the lifestyle of people. The reasoning was not really on point but will receive scoring marks just the same because it has a bit of relevance to the discussion. The conclusion was a prompt deviation as it suddenly referred to benefits and advantages and disadvantages, which were not part of the original prompt presentation. This is basically, an essay that does not meet the passing score requirements for a task 2 essay