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Writing task 2 - Taking a gap year is very ubiquitous in many developed countries


hocieltsvoibup 1 / -  
Nov 28, 2020   #1

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages about gap year



Today, a lot of youngsters select to take a gap year before going to university in many areas. The aim of this essay will be to reflect on some of the advantages and disadvantages of this issue

The main advantage of taking a gap year is that it can cultivate yourself. Thanks to the gap year, many students can broaden their horizons and have incredible experiences about culture, regions, lifestyle in many areas. For instance, the evening news reported that in 2019, in developed countries, 95% students choose to work in many fields, do the volunteer or travel to new areas before studying post graduate. As a result students will know what they really interest in or what their dream job. Therefore , by dint of taking a gap year, students can sharpen themselves and choose correct job

On the other hand, taking a gap year is time consuming. Instead of spending time working or traveling , many students starting university studIes after finishing high school. Because they focus on learning theories than practical. For example, according to recent survey by Queen's university found that in Vietnam, almost youngsters want to have bachelor's degree earliest to get a job. Therefore, in many developing countries, taking a gap year is time consuming and unnecessary for them.

In conclusion, taking a gap year is very ubiquitous in many developed countries. However, this problem renders both of benefits and drawbacks
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Nov 29, 2020   #2
The restatement is acceptable. It is brief and not highly informative in terms of the information from the original prompt. The fact that it retains the original topic is what makes the presentation sentence acceptable. The advantage and disadvantage topic outlines are missing from the presentation though. The presentation of the discussion topics, one for each (advantage and disadvantage) would have helped prove to the examiner that you understood the discussion instructions. Regardless, the paragraph works in terms of the TA considerations, to the extent previously mentioned.

Try not to mention any sources, even if it is the evening news, in any paragraph. Do not use actual percentages. Just use estimates or personal knowledge. Public knowledge is also acceptable, but not information that seems to be researched such as the evening news and the percentage reported. I am not sure what you meant to say in this portion:

Therefore , by dint of taking a gap year,

I think you meant to say "Therefore, by taking a gap year..."

Your conclusion is unacceptable. It does not properly recap the previous discussion to create a summarized presentation within 40 words or, 2 or more sentences.


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