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IELTS Task 2 : Talent search program on television.


Clark Kent 20 / 23 6  
Oct 5, 2015   #1
Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

Prospecting talented people by particular television show have been famous in many countries nowadays. I strongly believe that it is the best system that can help humankind to reach their dreams to become actors and actresses.

Today, the number of television programs which entertains human increased dramatically since the 20th century. It cannot be separated from the high demand of spectators who want to watch an amusement performance of the candidates. The show not only gives advantages for the contestant, but also the television company. The rating of the television program growth significantly since the first show and reached a peak at the final day. The audiences are very satisfied thanks to this event and spend much time to watch directly in the location or watch on the television. In Conclusion, the show presents a spectacular entertainment for the audience and benefit to the participant and the television company.

However, I argue that this program is the top mode to detect human with endowment in particular part, such singing. Simon Fuller is the first man who creates this show in 2001 with name 'Pop Idol' and now transform into 'British Idol'. Thanks to Simon, many countries follow his way to find gifted human being in the world. Due to many countries who organize this event, new actors and actresses are showing up and become famous because of it. Most of them come from poor family and remote village, but they can change their destiny by this program. For example, Kelly Clarkson before succeeding in American Idol was a cocktail waitress and sales promotion girl, thanks to American Idol she becomes famous and release two albums since won the first American Idol in 2006. To conclude, this method is really helpful to the entrant who want to succeed in entertainment area.

In conclusion, searching ingenious person through the television event is the most advance way nowadays and it is not only give the advantages to the candidates, but also to the companies.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Oct 5, 2015   #2
Muflih, I like the way that you responded to the essay. You displayed an understanding of pop culture and its history and accurately connected the interests of the viewer with the way new talent can be discovered by way of entertainment. You showed a full understanding of the prompt even though your English response needs some work. Your point of view is clear and your effort to make yourself understood in English really stands out. I hope that the corrections I will be showing you in relation to your essay can help you improve some more :-) Here are the corrections:

Prospecting talented people by via a particular television show have has become been famous in many countries nowadays .

humankind people to reach their dreams to become of becoming actors and actresses.

Today, the number of television programs which entertains human entertainment programs

an amusement amusing performance of the from the candidates.

The show not only gives advantages for to the

The rating of the television program growth significantly since increases significantly from

and reached s a peak at on the

In C conclusion, the show presents a spectacular entertainment for to the audience - Since this is not the real end of the essay, you should not say "in conclusion" just present your transitory sentence at the end.

to detect human with endowment in particular part, discover talented people such singing

Simon Fuller is was the first man

who creates d this type of show in 2001

with name called 'Pop Idol' and which is now transforminto called 'British Idol'

many countries follow his way to find gifted human being in the world now use this method to find talent across the world

poor family ies and remote villages - When you say some, that is plural form so all references should be plural

Kelly Clarkson, before succeeding in American Idol

promotion girl, . Thanks to

she becomes became famous and released two albums since she won the first American Idol in 2006.

To conclude, this This method is really helpful to the entrant talented person who wants to succeed in the entertainment area.

searching ingenious person for talented persons through the television event is the most advance way nowadays

it is not only gives the advantages


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