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IELTS Task 2 : Talented Shows on TV, Are They Good Method or Just Entertainment?


aniani 20 / 20 13  
Oct 5, 2015   #1
Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today.

Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


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Nowadays, many television programs are searching for talented people and the programs have been famous in many communities. Lots of human beings believe that the shows are a better way of looking for talented people, whereas some think that they just entertain the society. This essay will discuss both points of view.

With regard to the talented show programs, most man kinds think that it is a good method of searching gifted individuals, because sometimes the programs take the candidate from street singers and musicians. The program can dignify many street performers and make them popular. For example, a boy band from America, One Direction, has become popular in many societies in the world from X-Factor which one of the talented show program in America.

However, many believe that they just entertain mankind and profitably the television. For example, when the television perform the talented shows, the television will perform many advertisements on its program. So I think, the inhabitants are just an object of television's commercial. Then, another reason why it just for entertaining people, most of the talented shows do not include an education for adult or children, they just focus on their rating and profit, but they ignore the precious value for persons. In my view, it is useless for human beings.

To sum up, although some people argue that televised talent shows are a good method of finding talented people, I would argue they are just entertainment programs and there is no precious and educational value for communities and children. I think the programs just to commerce for TV stations.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 5, 2015   #2
Ani, your essay is one of the best responses to the prompt that I have read so far. You have shown a good grasp of the English language and can use it to properly create understandable sentences. Your paragraphs as well informed and offer an insight into the basis of your opinion. I am just wondering though why most of you fall back on the financial aspect of the show when talking about these shows as a form of entertainment alone. When one speaks of entertainment, it does not have to refer to the money that the show makes for the producers. Rather, it refers to whether you just watch the show to fill in your empty hours or if you really want to watch because you want to help talented people create their careers :-)

There are a few points of grammar correction in your essay. Here it goes :-)

With regard to the talented show programs, most man kinds people think

of searching for gifted individuals

can dignify discover many street performers

in the world from after winning the talent show X-Factor

just entertain mankind people and create profitably the profits for the producer television of the show.

when the television program airs, the producer makes money from paid advertising on the show perform the talented shows, the television will perform many advertisements on its program

the inhabitants viewers

another reason why it just is that the show is just for entertaining people,

talented shows do not include an education for adults or children

I think the programs just produce just to commerce for TV stations.
Clark Kent 20 / 23 6  
Oct 5, 2015   #3
Hi aniani, overall, it's a good writing. However, you should focus on your pattern.
For example, in the second paragraph (first body), you write clearly your idea and give examples. But, as I said at the beginning, you have to pay attention to the pattern that you use. My suggestion to you, for in the second paragraph you given conclusion because you do not use 'multiple ideas', so there should be little conclusion as cover for the second paragraph.

With regard to the talented show programs, most man [...] from X-Factor which one of the talented show program in America.

YOU SHOULD GIVE ANOTHER REASON OR YOU GIVE CONCLUSION REGARDING THIS PARAGRAPH.


Thank you very much.

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