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TED Talk "How Fear of Nuclear Power is Hurting The Environment"


Gigih12 10 / 8  
Oct 12, 2016   #1
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How Fear of Nuclear Power is Hurting The EnvironmentTED talk by Michael Shellenberger-June 2016

Nowadays, a lot of people in California use clean energy such as solar energy for daily life. It proves by the amount of roof house in California which used a solar panel to produce the electric energy. His research shows the demand of solar energy increased since 2009 and still going up until now, but the percentage of electricity from clean energy started to decrease from 36% to 31% since 1990's. Fossil fuels in California is increasing sharply than the demand of clean energy. Four nuclear plants almost equal solar in 2015 to produced electricity. It is only 10% of energy that produced by solar panel in California. The problem is how to optimalized the demand of energy nowadays. The option is by using nuclear energy.

Nuclear energy has very low-carbon compared with coal, natural gas, and solar panel. The research shows that nuclear energy could provide a lot of power than the others. In other hand, the use of nuclear energy can affect the environment. Survey from Ipsos in 2014 showed solar energy was the most favourite in California, while the second was wind energy, and followed by oil and nuclear energy. Although climate crisis attack mostly part of the worlds, In the next 2040 China will sell nuclear reactors online and it is a nuclear reactor gas. Recent studies show nuclear is the safest in air pollution that coal, petroleum, biomass, and the others gas. The conclusion is to solve the climate crisis or to overcome the clean energy crisis is not by judging the nuclear machine but by solving the fear itself.

oktoberlin12 1 / 3  
Oct 12, 2016   #2
Hai Gigih!
Here are some notes for you.

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...nuclear reactors by online and it is...
...in air pollution that than coal, petroleum, biomass...
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Overall, your essay is well-written.
Hope this would help you.
You did a great job.
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 15, 2016   #3
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections

Nowadays, a lot of many people in California use clean energy such asrenewable sources which are solar energy for daily life.
... increased since 2009 and still going growing up (...) electricity from clean energy renewable sources started to experienced decrease from 36%...
... sharply than the demand of clean energy renewable sources. Moreover,Four nuclear plants almost ...
... the demand of energy nowadays in current situations. The option for this problem is people canuse nuclear energy.

You can added introduction in the first paragraph.
You can change the word with the another similar word.


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