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TALKS IELTS 1: The map of Pellington city - new shopping mall


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 13, 2014   #1
Question:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparison where relevant.
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Answer:
The map shows a drawing of Pellington. This city has population 120,000 people and it has three sites for a new hypermarket (A, B, and C).

In general, both of two areas (A and C) crossed by railway, and one site (B) is in Countryside.

The first possible are in the industrial side (C). This location is more perfectly because it is near with worker in the industry which they need something, if they get starving or others. The second location is in Countryside. This is place which is very good for some people because it still natural and far distance with industry company. So, some people can relax in this market, but people should walk as long as time to go there.

However, the last possible area is totally different than one and second. It is located in the residential which is near with traffic-free zone park and industrial. Therefore, many persons always throw this area. With the result, they need place for shopping or buying something for their family. So, they go to this hypermarket. It would be the crowded market.

In short, the last possible area is better because it is the city center and many people cross around it. This place give many benefits for hypermarket for getting opportunity to get much money.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 14, 2014   #2
Thanks to Google, this is information about maps in IELTS.
Generally there are two types of maps in the IELTS test. First, they may give us two maps of the same place but in different times (e.g 1940, 2010). They ask us to write a report on how this place had changed over time. Let's call such maps diachronic. Second, they give us one single map and ask us to describe two locations on them or even compare them. Let's call them synchronic maps.

Diachronic maps
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: state what the direction of change is (is the city more modernized, has it turned to a tourist attraction/resort, etc)
Body: start with the most obvious changes and then try to cover all the changes.

Synchronic maps.
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: depending on what the purpose of those points are, give an opinion about which one may serve our purpose better.
Body: compare the two points
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 14, 2014   #3
The map shows a drawing of Pellington. This city has population 120,000 people and it has three sites for a new hypermarket (A, B, and C).

The map details the town of Pellington and its identified potential locations for building a new hypermarket.
In general, both of two areas (A and C) crossed by railway, and one site (B) is in Countryside.

The first possible are in the industrial side (C).

.... First possible of what? You need to be more specific.

However, the last possible area is totally different than onethe first and second.
Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Apr 14, 2014   #4
In short, the last possible area is better because it is the city center and many people cross around it. This place give many benefits for hypermarket for getting opportunity to get much money.

I think in the first task of Ielts writing you shouldn't give your personal opinion! You have to report what you see on this map.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 14, 2014   #5
However, the last possible area is totally different than one and second.

... well .... this sentence is very confusing. It is better go by A,B, and C as the map defines these areas rather than saying first,second and last possible areas. This task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills. In report writing, what is most important is that your ability to present data clearly. So, make sure your sentences deliver facts very clearly.
ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 18, 2014   #6
The first possible are in the industrial side (C).

singular sist :)
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 18, 2014   #7
This is place which is very good for some people

i think right if you just said :

This place is very good for some people
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 19, 2014   #8
It is located in the residential which is near with traffic-free zone park and industrial

hi eva...

may be better if you said

location is in the residential ...


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