IELTS Writing Task1_NOx emissions by vehicle type in London in 2020(%)

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nitrogen oxide emitted from London's vehicles

The chart illustrates the proportion of nitrogen oxide (NOx) exhausted by six kinds of vehicles in London in the year of 2020.

To start with, it is obvious that bus is predicted to occupy the highest percentage with 32%, and it will be followed by car( 21%) and taxi( 20%). NOx will be produced by van and lorry with 14% and 12% respectively. Finally, motorbike will only account for 1%.

Looking at the data in more detail, these six vehicles can be divided into three types, including public transportation vehicles( bus and taxi), personal vehicles( car and motorbike), and cargo vehicles( van and lorry). NOx is expected to be mostly exhausted by public transportation with 52% in total, then cargo vehicles with 32%. Personal vehicles will contribute the smallest proportion with 22%.

With all things considered, bus will produce most NOx and motorbike will record the least in London in 2020.

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Huang, with only 1 word written over the minimum word requirement for this essay, I cannot say that you have fully utilized your scoring potential based on the scoring brackets. Writing too little means you are not well versed in the use of the English language or you lack the analytical skills to properly write this essay. Writing too many words indicates that you are trying to score higher based solely on your LR skills rather than your TA ability in relation to the remaining scoring brackets. Either way, what I can see with this essay is a writer who is too nervous to try and write a maximum of 175 words for better scoring consideration.

Your summary overview is incomplete. It also misrepresents the periodic table name for Nitrogen Oxide in the presentation. The reader should first be informed that NOx is the symbol for Nitrogen Oxide in scientific discussions. You also should have indicted what type of image was provided, how the measurements were done and what vehicles were involved. For example, I would have written this as:

A pie chart that shows the division of Nitrogen Oxide in London based on 6 types of vehicles has been provided. The measurement, which was done in percentages shows the amount of emission for the bus, taxi, motorbike, car, van, and lorry transport systems. Throughout the analysis, the scientific symbol for Nitrogen Oxide, NOx was used and will be used as the reference name in this analysis report. The trend shows that the bus has the highest emission capacity of the 6 transport types.

You are writing run-on sentences. Each paragraph of this 4 paragraph essay needs to be completed using a minimum of 3 sentences with a maximum of 5 sentences for C&C and GRA purposes. You will score quite low in those sections because of your jumbled presentation. I am afraid that your score will not be very good for this presentation because you have not done enough and written it properly to get a better scoring consideration.