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What should be taught in universities?


lacusclyne 16 / 25 11  
Jun 23, 2015   #1
It is widely believed that university acts as a main drive for economic growth, a strong foundation fo individuals prosperity and social mobility. However, it is controversial whether universities should only provide students with essential knowledge and skills in their workplace or make knowledge accessible to students, regardless of future use. Personally, i strongly think universities should concentrate their main concern on students employability.

Judging by the present situation, youth unemployment seems to increase at a rapid pace. The main culprit of this phenomenon is believed to be the unpractical and unrealistic curricula provided by universities. Therefore, universities should change their management system and focus on providing students with needed skills in the workplace. To be more specific, for students who aim to be self-employed in the future, skills related to entrepreneurship should be their main focus. On the contrary, for those who wish to work for a big corporation with international repute, such skills as team-work, critical thinking or problem solving must be enhanced.

This does not necessarily mean that we should overlook other academic subjects because there is rarely any subjects deemed useless in academic environment. In effect, all subjects solve different purposes, which, at some point of our life, may be useful. For example, for those who major in literature, history can provide them with useful material for their writings. Therefore, universities should spend a fair amount of resource on those subjects, especially in an era where multi-ability is becoming increasingly important.

In the nutshell, schools should focus on teaching essential skills for future employment without overlooking and forgetting about other subjects.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 24, 2015   #2
- It is widely believed that university acts as a main drivedriver for economic growth, a strong foundation for an individuals prosperity and social mobility.

- Personally, i strongly thinkbelieve that universities should concentrate their main concern on students employability.

- Judging byfrom the present situation, youth unemployment seems to increase at a rapid pace.

- The main culprit of this phenomenon is believed to be the unpractical and unrealistic curriculacurriculum provided by universities.

- On the contrary, for those who wish to work for a big corporation with international reputereputation , such skills as team-work, critical thinking or problem solving must be enhanced.

- In effect, all subjects solveserve a different purpose, which, at some point of our life, may be useful.

- In thea nutshell, schools should focus on teaching essential skills for future employment without overlooking and forgetting about other subjects.

Lacuslyne, this is a good piece of writing and I agree that focus and order of importance is good in developing the minds of our students. As one said, our children is the key to our brighter future, add a little bit of hardwork, knowledge and the can - do attitude, they should be good to go and face our ever challenging world.

Proof read all your writing

Keep writing

Cheers!!!
tuananh 8 / 15  
Jun 28, 2015   #3
I have only one suggestion:
'the primary culprit' instead of ' the main culprit'
Anyway, your essay is great!


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