Hai Sabby multani...
that's nice essay. however, allow me to give you some suggestions in your writing..
Tax is collected by various mode such as
- by Tool tax, Educational tax and so on.
in academic writing especially in IELTS, you have to avoid using lazy word like so on, etc. and many more. It would be better if you write tool tax and educational tax
I accede to this interpretation that parents should not
be pay tax, who send their children in private school because they are already sacrifice by spending huge amount in school as a fees for their children's education. For instance, in Canada, the private school or university want a big chunk of money from guardian who want higher education for their children. so So I notion that they should not do more sacrifice by paypaying education tax.
On the other hand, it is believe that all people are equal, nobody
areis different to each other. so allAs a result, people have responsibility to pay tax as aan equality. Moreover, we know the collection of money by tax is useused infor government school for covering student's education of students , authority schools can also provide a higher education to students like private schools. In addition to , we also pay aan emergency such as fire brigade or ambulance. As an evidence, Fortunate some people do not use this help in their lives but they pay this tax so as this all parents should be pay education tax even they send their children in private schools.
to be careful if you write an essay. in IELTS, I suggest you to don't judge in general like all people. you may write "It is undeniable that people tend to have same perception.
I suggest you to revise your this body paragraph, needless to say that writer in IELTS essay not involve directly in essay. you have to minimize putting like "I, WE" you can write I if you give suggestion or your own opinion.
Good Luck, My apologize if I make mistake..:)