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IELTS ; Should tax be paid ? Advantages and Disadvantages


Purwati Ayu 7 / 14 2  
Feb 17, 2014   #1

Tax should be paid to the country, what are the advantages and disadvantages



  To operate a country, Government needs human resources, technologies and financial resources. Financial resources in Indonesia gets from tax of citizens, it contributes almost 80% state budgeting. However, it means inability of government to maximize Indonesia's natural resources independently without must collect from people.

  I believe there are some good aims about from this policy. In particular for policy makers do not need extra effort to earn money from non tax revenue. Because as far i know, policy makers are busy to oversee corruption cases. Beside that, tax is one kind of fiscal policy which is really useful to apply when inflation happened. By adding the tariff it can decrease money circulation in citizens. The last reason, tax is one way to detract discrepancy rich people and needy citizens cause rich people pay tariff higher than another.

  In contrary tax gives old problem which never done, corruption. Frequently, big amount of money changes the policy makers orientation when they campaigned. Unfortunately, tax is known as fresh field to corrupt. Different cases happened in poor inhabitants, sometimes tax become irrational. Almost all aspects are touched by bureaucrat policy such as pet tax, fireworks tax and wine tax.

  All in all paying tax is needed and give big contribution for this country because many problem can be solved by tax. In spite of our government still manage it disorderly.

Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 17, 2014   #2
To operate a country, Government ...

Governments don't operate countries, but govern countries.
The government needs to generate revenue to meet its expenditure that needs to be spent on developing a country.

Financial resources in Indonesia gets from tax of citizens...

Why do you particularly talk about Indonesia? This topic is a broad one that covers all governments across the globe. In the body paras, you can have this as an example.But do not have examples in your introduction.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 17, 2014   #3
Task II want you to write at least 250 words, please kindly re-check yours.

I am not an expert, but for me

Because as far i know

it is seem like personal view which inappropriate for formal writing.
OP Purwati Ayu 7 / 14 2  
Feb 17, 2014   #4
thanks for commentating Pahan :)
Pahan

but govern countries

I think too extreme usage "govern", because it is identical with communism regime and I adapt with nowadays politics system, democratic, by using "operate" word.

But do not have examples in your introduction.

okay, i agree with you. thank you so much.
OP Purwati Ayu 7 / 14 2  
Feb 17, 2014   #5
you're right hanafi, only 242 words in my essay. thanks for a new info and correcting
Alison 5 / 13  
Feb 17, 2014   #6
You used a wide range of vocab in this essay, which is impressive.
However, I feel that your essay needs to be more formal. For example, using "cause" instead of "because" sounds improper. And pay attention to punctuations as well.

Cheers!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 18, 2014   #7
I think too extreme usage "govern", because it is identical ...

"governing" does not refer to any particular extreme regime. It can be communism, capitalistic, democratic, kingship or any type of governing systems. I vote for the word "govern" to "operate" for this particular sentence because a government needs to conduct the policy, actions, and affairs of with authority irrespective of whatever political inclination they would have. "Operate" is more task oriented word which is used to describe controlling functioning of machines, processes and small scale systems.
Atakeielts 5 / 13  
Feb 18, 2014   #8
Financial resources in Indonesia gets from tax
think should replace 'get' by 'are'

I belive there are some good aims about from this policy.
grammar mistake in there probably i think ....

:)
Atakeielts 5 / 13  
Feb 23, 2014   #9
the introduction looks very detailed, it should be clear and general.


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