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Tax Private car owner for improve public transportation which is problematic


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
May 7, 2014   #1
In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owner heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such of solution?

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Private car owner become part of necessities of life for citizen. Today's almost all people in one family have private owner car. For having new own car is very easy today's. Even though, only little money people can get their car owner by paying on credit. That is why increasingly private car owner. Because of that, traffic jams become crucial problem in the country. In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owner heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.

The advantage governments from tax private car owner can be use for public society. The government can improve public transportation by using tax fund. And then, by improve public transportation it is mean traffic jam can be decreased because people change from private car owner to public transportation. Next, selling of car will decrease because nobody interested to buy a car. In this case, people more comfortable by using public transportation than using private car owner.

The disadvantage of tax private car owner make people just enough income will be afraid to buy a car. In fact, people need private car even only one in one house for family need. For example, if in the middle night unexpected one of our family get sick and we have not much time to call ambulance we need a private car to carry out our family arrive until hospital. And then, the tax enlarges cost public society to pay the tax.

To conclude, it will be encouraging if the government increase tax private car owner for improve public transportation. As we know in develop country today's public transportation is still difficult. That is why people more prepare to use private car owner than public transportation. Although, the car is damage but they still using it.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
May 8, 2014   #2
Yes, Pahan is right. A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.

To conclude, it will be encouraging if the government increase tax private car owner for improve public transportation. As we know in develop country today's public transportation is still difficult.

It is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this pattern below:
1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc,
2. a summary of the main points or a restatement of the thesis (in different words!)
3. a final comment, based on the information in the essay
The final comment can be:
3.1. a warning or prediction (often using the first conditional: If ..., ... will ...)
3.2. a suggestion or recommendation (often using should or must)
fikri 5 / 317 71  
May 11, 2014   #3
to connect these paragraphs, you should use a connector which shows contrast such as 'however' 'on the other hand' etc,,it will help the readers to easily understand what is the content of these paragraphs


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