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"teacher performs a vital role" - Computers should replace teachers in a classroom?

Tank 2 / 4  
Sep 15, 2011   #1
In the age of high technology,computer role an unreplacement position with it's unique value,so much function as it has,bring computer up to be one of the most popular product,nonetheless,is it good enough to replace the role of teacher in a clssroom.

Indeed,computer is an intelligent crystallize of human research,it's feature rest with it's multifunction,the vital reason with it's popularity is internet connection which can be used to search to information and breaking news,besides the internet involves so many opinion from over the world that can provide the answer which doesn't exist in our course books,on the other hand,it might include the knowledge the teacher even never heard about,but it doesn't mean computer is qualified to take the place of teacher.

First of all,teacher can help students how to judge what is right or wrong,especially underage children which can be the most essential growing stage,teacher won't teach them merely in the books,but also help them to identify what they need to do,this is a work,in some sense,computers will never achieve,besides,students can not ask computer some particular question,for instance,computer can not tell you how to improve your study effeciency,because students all have completely different condition,only teacher can inform you what you going to do including any condition which can frustrate you.

Thus it can be seen,teacher performs a vital role to students,computer can not replace their duty in a classroom,at least not now!
basawang 10 / 76  
Sep 16, 2011   #2
1. You have to end your sentence in a proper way. Too many sentences connected wrongly.

2. In the second sentence of the first paragraph, you mention computers have many functions. I suggest you should give some examples (Such as...).
OP Tank 2 / 4  
Sep 16, 2011   #3
Thanks for your comment!
I just tried to write this essay in the draft without any correction!So just ignored about the grammar part!
basawang 10 / 76  
Sep 16, 2011   #4

You mean you knew what is the correct grammar, but you still post your draft?

I spent some time working on it. It seems meaningless.

I give you two suggestions.

1. Wrong grammars mislead the readers. It cannot be ignored.

2. Do not do this again.
OP Tank 2 / 4  
Sep 16, 2011   #5
No,I wanted to test myself in essay typing,then i didn't take care of the grammar part...
sorry for bothering you,i will never do it again!
so what else you think of this essay?

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