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Teachers lost their roles in modern education?


lastsky 3 / 5 1  
Sep 22, 2014   #1
Teacher used to convey information,but now with wide resources of information,there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology development has revolutionized the methodology of education. Peolple now can access wide range of information easily through internet. Therefore, some people think teachers will lose their role which is to convey information in modern education soon. As for as I am concerned , I doubt strongly the possibility of this assertion.

There is no denying that teachers will not be replaced in all kinds of aspects.
In the first place , teachers won't be replaced where those wide resources can not cover. For example, in some impoverished area lack of electric and transportation, people hve no such modern equipments, and teachers become the most affordable channel for them to acquire information.

In the second place, some special education for the disabled only are carried out by teachers. For example,the blind can't see and the deaf can't hear those active multi-media classes. In order to boost social harmonious development, the government should hire teachers to service them.Besides,some courses rely on teachers like football and swimming, modern facilities just can be adopted as a tools to improve their performance.

Granted,modern education can bring us many benefits. Firstly, with the popularity of internet education, student won't go to school and can learn many courses at home,which save their time and cost. Secondly,for government, because they need not build and maintain tons of classrooms and hire employees, a great number of budget can be saved and used to invest in other urgent fields. But even if modern education has so many advantages, teachers will not lose their important positions in modern education. Teachers can learn how to use modern technology and adopt them into their classes, and make their teaching more effective and active.

In sum, despite that modern resources have many advantages and replace teacher's positon in some extent, teachers will still act as core roles in modern education.

YULIS 9 / 17 1  
Sep 22, 2014   #2
There is no denying that teachers won't be replaced in all kinds of aspects..

give that sentences on introduction paragraph
Adamtong 9 / 32 2  
Sep 23, 2014   #3
I have read your essay.
It is very fluent and straight forward.But i am afraid it is a little bit boring and lack of details.
I can see a lot of reasons supporting your point,but the without explanations,the reason is pale.
william731 18 / 43 13  
Sep 23, 2014   #4
Technology development brings about a host of new educational methods like online classes which convey information replacing teachers

I think the last part of the sentence does no make any sense.
For me, I would write: Technological development has revolutionized the methodology of education such as the invention of online tutorials. People nowadays can assess wide range of information easily through internet. Therefore, some people believe that the traditional role of teachers which is to convey information would disappear soon. However....

There is no denying that teachers won't be replaced in all kinds of aspects.

I think we should avoid using won't or can't in formal writing.

For example, in some poverish area where there is no electric and any modern equipment can't work, only can teachers convey information in classes.

impoverished areas
electric device
only teachers can
I think we can better say : in some impoverished areas where not every person can afford modern equipments and teachers become the most affordable channel for them to acquire information.

Last but not least,some programmes only be
runned by teachers like football and swimming courses

Personally, I think this point is irrelevant because the focus here is about delivering information/knowledge but not about coaching
And "runned" should be run

Modern facilities can be adopted as a tools to improve their performance.
OP lastsky 3 / 5 1  
Sep 23, 2014   #5
Thank you for your suggestion.
I want to expand this idea further in the following paragraph "In the first place ", "In the second place " and "last but not least"


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