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Should teachers be paid more when some people gain huge money, out of scale of their work importance


vlinh1991 2 / 6  
Dec 2, 2014   #1
In today's society people have many choices for their career, some of the important jobs are undervalued, whereas economic works are complimented. Some people are of the opinion that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are not underpaid, whereas other people like actors or company bosses are not overpaid. Nevertheless, I am inclined to believe that actors star and actresses and people who run large companies are worthy of huge sum of money that they being paid, owing to the following reasons. [..]
briannalottchea 2 / 16 2  
Dec 2, 2014   #2
In today's society, people have many choices for their career,.S ome of the important jobs are undervalued, whereas economic works are complimented. Some people are of the opinion that certain workers, like nurses, doctors and teachers, are not underpaid, whereaschoose another word, it sounds repetitive. other people, like actors or company bosses, are not overpaid. Nevertheless, I am inclined to believe that actors,star and actresses and people who run large companies are worthy of huge sums of money that they are being paid,.owing to the following reasons.reword this.

Nobody can deny that there are certain workers, like nurses, doctors and teachers, who are essential to the fabric of society, and should arebe rewarded appropriately. However, in any workprofessionalsoexist two issues exist,.such asThese issues are risks and advantages. Although certain workers are underpaid, they have a stable and leisure life. Furthermore, certain professionals' jobs, like teachers and doctors,are also appreciated dignity and ethics, those is priceless gift that many people are to exchange their large number of money for it but that cannot.I'm sorry, I can't really understand this sentence.
On the other hand, although film actors and, actresses orand company bosses are paid large numberamounts of money, their steady life is uncertain,.F or instance, some film actors are overpaid for their role, but then the unemployment has stayed with them for a long timeThis is unclear . As be all aforementioned, it is not easy to show particular criterions for payment, but a majority of people usually base it on experience, while others believe that young people are creative and they can integrate easily the globalization, can apply effectively modern technology, that are grounded arguments. Besides, I think that people make products, which people favorite or people are satisfied their valuable metal, so that they are willing to pay a large sum of money to use such products.I can't really understand this sentence either. Just needs to be reworded.

In conclusion,It's almost always not a good idea to end your essay with "in conclusion". I am convinced that although certain professional's jobs, like nurses, teachers or doctors, are underpaid, they get invaluable rewards, while the work's film actors or company bosses are uncertain, so that they are worthy of their remuneration. Experience, creation and value of the product are liable criterionsAutocorrect says this is not a word. to decide amount of the remuneration that people get.

Is this a college essay? The content is there, it just needs some reworking. I hope I helped!!
OP vlinh1991 2 / 6  
Dec 3, 2014   #3
"are also appreciated dignity and ethics, those is priceless gift that many people are to exchange their large number of money for it but that cannot.I'm sorry, I can't really understand this sentence" => they are appreciated about dignity and ethics, that are priceless gift that many people want to (be to) exchange their money for priceless gift (it), but they cannot exchange.

"but then the unemployment has stayed with them for a long time. This is unclear" => can it be: but then they are unemployed for a long time?

"I think that people make products, which people favorite or people are satisfied their valuable mental, so that they are willing to pay a large sum of money to use such products.I can't really understand this sentence either. Just needs to be reworded." => i think that people are willing to pay a large sum of money to use metal products,it are products that people favorite and are satisfied, for instance, movies or songs, so that anyone who can make mental products is worthy of their high remuneration.

i graduated in economic, i am studying ielts (academic), i am studying master's degree. i come from Vietnam, i hope you will help me. thank you very much
briannalottchea 2 / 16 2  
Dec 4, 2014   #4
That's awesome! I have friends from Vietnam!
OP vlinh1991 2 / 6  
Dec 9, 2014   #5
briannalottchea
How about this: appreciate dignity and ethics, which are priceless gifts that many people want to exchange for money but cannot.
Yes, I think this would work.
Is this supposed to be mental as in your mind or metal as in the hard, shiny thing? hahaha sorry if that's a bit unclear.

=> YES. Thank you for all your kind help
can you tell me your facebook address?. i want to be your friend for exchange English.


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