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IELTS technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people


wulanaulia 1 / 4  
Nov 7, 2015   #1
Earlier technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people than the recent technological development will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this era, technology becomes hot issues in worldwide. Some people believe that past technological development gave more advantages towards the life of common people than recent technology. Following this, I fully disagree that recent technological development give drawback to change the life of usual people.

First of all, it is undoubted that current technology makes a simple way of life for common people. For example, the differences between typewriter and computer, which are typewriter as earlier technology and computer as recent technology. In the past, people should type word by word carefully, for there is no excuse for making mistake on paper. If they make an error, they should repeat their writing from beginning with using new paper. By contrast, every person can make everything that they want by emerging nowadays technology. Not only can write easily without thinking about mistakes, but also there are several applications which are given by computers, such as games, calculators, and musics. Therefore, it shows clearly that recent technology affords to help life movement of people to be meaningful.

Moreover, current technology can reduce busy work, so can be more productive. For instance, many students and workers have a tight schedule to do their assignment. By using Google doc, they can still finish their job. Google doc is an application that does not need gathering for accomplishing the assignment. It only needs connection network. They can correct their assignment each others on the same paper. Therefore, it can gives a more time for people to spent their time with their relatives. From this statement, it is obviously that recent technological development outweight to change the way of people life to be better.

In summary, earlier technological lacks needed to develop for enhancing the quality of life common. Thus it is clear why the recent technology is more benefits to support a movement of people life to be productive and effective.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,207 469  
Nov 7, 2015   #2
Welcome to EF, I am eddy ,one of EF contributors, will show you how write a very powerful introduction in IELTS task 2.
In this era, technology becomes hot issues in worldwide. Some ...
This opening paragraph is good. Yet, there do seem to be a common flaw for the paragraph constructed. When it comes to the introductory paragraph, students are more likely to leave such a paragraph running without outline. By doing so, the intro brings no value. Let me give a try:

(1) An invention makes life more pleasant. (2) As such, it is agreed that early technologies offered significant advantages. The converse would appear to be true for ones claiming cutting-edge technologies have taken over the world. (3) Therefore, I would argue that recent devices are bound to alter human identity

Well, for me, I have place lots of confidence in the structure I suggest for IELTS students on this forum. In fact it is not something I invented or created, but a structure that I found doing some research on books

1. HOOK- a catchy phrase. It is not necessary to include this,but nevertheless such a way makes your intro more appealing.
2. Background information- simply reword the prompt given.
3. Thesis + Outline- write your claim here.

Hope this helps, - eddy suaib.
LonaRandan 1 / 2  
Nov 7, 2015   #3
Moreover, current technology can reduce busy work, so conj S Vit can be more productive.

In summary, earlier technological lacks needed to develop for enhancing the quality of life commoncommon life .
Luthfia Dewi 7 / 12 4  
Nov 8, 2015   #4
Hai Wulan, I'm Luthfia. May be, we are classmate in the TEST course. Isn't it?
Your topic is fascinate, therefore I try to give suggestions:
1. Actually the question doesn't ask the drawback, so it is better if your thesis statement explain the more side effects of technological recently for the future since it influence contain of your essay.

2. In this era, technology becomes hot issues in the worldwide.
:)
OP wulanaulia 1 / 4  
Nov 8, 2015   #5
Hi @eddies thank you so much for your help.
I have several questions
1. How can i make a good sentence in introduction? I just know that doesnt matter if i directly task response with the question.
2. Should the Body 1 and 2 have similar discussion? Actually i just wanna give example.
Thank you for your advance vocab @eddies

Hi @luthfia yeah, i think so, youre my next door.hihihi
Thank you fia, i got a wrong response right.


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