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Technologies are suppressing various professions and make them not so important for society


Sherzod457 1 / 1 1  
Sep 16, 2016   #1
Modern societies need specialists in certain fields, but not in others.
Some people therefore think that governments should pay university fees for students who study subjects that are needed by society. Those who choose to study less relevant subjects should not receive government funding.

Would the advantages of such an educational policy outweigh the disadvantages?


Specialists are required in every kinds of jobs, but today we have technologies that suppress various professions and make them not so important for society. This induced a variability in relevant subjects. Many consider that students who undergo courses of subjects those are needed by humans should be provided by government funding as those who study less relevant subjects should not.

On the one hand, there are a lots of opportunities created by this kind of educational policy that can motivate students to study in different subjects in spite of subjects that are redundanced. For instance, some would like to study subjects of art whereas other necessary specialists are needed in medecine or education, so this policy of funding can adjust this problem. Due to this policy the subjects needed by society would be more popular.

On the other hand, this attitude of government funding discriminates students who want to study less relevant subjects. Furthermore, specialists are needed in every fields and this policy can affect another subjects negatively. As an illustration, if the amount of doctors sores to critical point, it will possibly make this job much harder to get and less paid because of immense quantity of candidates for that job. This side of the idea of funding certain students can cause an explosion of discontent from students who do not receive university fees.

In my view, people should not make differences between students' subjects, because every person has his own desires as to be a musician, dancer or even austranaut. This educational funding system has an noteable lack that exemplifies the careless about preferences of students. Every student wishes to study well to get a good job in subjects where they want to work, so the socety should not make any troubles as unpayed university fees on their way. I believe that everyone deserves receiving government funding.

arisandy14 7 / 11 1  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
hay, Sherzo, i would like give some comments that is probably helpful.

in my opinion, there are several parts which is needed to be better. Point, "can affect another subjects" we can change (other subjects) because another for noun singular only. in the similar case, your sentence "if the amount of doctors sores to critical point" (amount is used for noun uncuntable so we cant use it in countable), it's better if a number of doctors sore.

those all, thanks.


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