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GRE: As technology becomes more and more advanced.. people rely on technology


silentwf 2 / 4  
Aug 26, 2011   #1
Hi everyone,
this is a practice essay from the GRE issue pool. There are some typos (i left them in purposely so i could figure out what i spell wrong).

Any feedbacks welcome :)

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to
think for themselves will surely deteriorate.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting
your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true
and explain how these considerations shape your position.

As technology becomes more and more advance and prevalent, people become more
and more reliant on technology. With more powerful computers and softwares, people do
become a bit less capable of thinking of some aspects of a problem. However, this does
not mean that the thinking ability of humans are detiorating nor will it any time soon.

The current form of technology which aids thinking is mainly software. We use
softwares for multifarious purposes, such as text editing, making financial reports,
calculating strength requirements for a car. However, these softwares do not obviate
people who use them. Softwares alone cannot think, they can only aid. Almost all
introductory programming lectures will always mention an acronym: GIGO. GIGO stands for
"garbage in, garbage out". This proves that softwares alone cannot check whether the
input data is reasonable, nor can it check the validity of the output.

Sure, we all use spell checkers, grammar checkers, calculators and other forms
of technology, but we must realize that we still are the brains of what we do. Typing an
essay with the aid of a spell checker and grammar checker improves performance of the
writer. The writer no longer needs to worry about minutae and can now focus on bigger
parts of integration. Scientists and engineers may rely on calculators or programs to
expedite calculation and prediction processes. But these two examples have one common
aspect: humans always do the thinking and input their thought to the gadgets.

A more concrete example would be found in the financial industry. People working
in the industry rely ever more on the technology that has been created. Internet and
computers have helped people aggragate information so they no longer have to spend time
and effort piecing out the tiny details. Now they can rely on data that is presented to
them and make calls quicker than ever before. And in the field of finance, time is
money.

Although many of us who rely on technology may forget the spelling of some words
or forget the calculation procedures of differentiation, we are no longer caught up in
tiny details that impede the developement of a larger scheme. Relying on technology,
instead of deteriorating our ability to think, has helped us improve our ability to
think more abstractly than ever before.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Aug 27, 2011   #2
As technology becomes more and more advanced and prevalent, people become more
and more reliant on technology.

With more powerful computers and softwares, people do
become a bit less capable of thinking for themselves of some aspects of a problem.

However, this does
not mean that the thinking ability of humans isdeteriorating nor will it any time soon.

The current form of technology which aids thinking is mainly software. We use softwares for multiple purposes, such as text editing, making financial reports, calculating strength requirements for a car.

Almost all introductory programming lectures will always mention an acronym: GIGO. GIGO stands for
"garbage in, garbage out".

But these two examples have one common aspect: humans always do the thinking and input their thought to the gadgets.---Good point!

Nice essay! Good luck in school and have fun!

:)
ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Aug 27, 2011   #3
Hi Suh-Shin
Do not rewrite the topic at the fist sentence of your paraghraph, you should restate it (such as paraphrazing or restatement technique in Toefl)

GOOOOOOOOD LUCK ;)
apieceof 3 / 5  
Aug 27, 2011   #4
Debug:
Internet and computers have helped people aggragate(aggregate ) information ...

It is a good argument. I like it!
OP silentwf 2 / 4  
Aug 29, 2011   #5
@Susan & Fang Yu
Thanks for picking out my errors. I think i need to proofread my essays more before I submit them

@Masha
Could you give me an example of paraphrasing? Would this be a good one? "More and more people now rely on technology to aid them in their everyday life. [With more...]"


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