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TOEFL :Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often make them more complicated


krnjeong 2 / 3  
Feb 17, 2014   #1
topic : Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often turns out to make them more complicated.

Many people think they are blessed to be in the era of high technology. With newly developing technologies, people are able to carry various tasks more convenient and easy. For example, we no longer have to travel to DMV to renew our driver's license or drive to bank for sending money. Ancient people would probably think that we are like magicians. However, even with all the conveniences, we would have to admit that technologies made our lives more complicated. There are couple reasons and examples to support my answer.

Of course, new technologies are always great. However, it takes time for people to adapt them. Since we are informed with devices that are produced with new features nearly every day, many people often get lost. For instance, I use new Iphone which I personally think is great. However, even though I used it for couple months, I still do not know how to use all the features proficiently. At first, I tried to go through all the instructions but, soon, I gave up because I found out that it is time-consuming and there are too many things to learn.

Next, technology destroys the language. Ever since people used computers or cellphones to chat with others, they created their own language to communicate. Because people try to type as fast as they are talking, they use a lot of abbreviations and broken language. This has gotten worse with twitter, myspace, and facebook. What are even worse, young people who are still in the early ages are exposed to them and impeded by the newly developed inventions. To clarify, my younger brother does not know how to spell the words correctly and he talks to his friends with terms that I have never heard of. I have tried to correct him for couple times but he just thinks that I am too conservative.

Although technologies allowed us to have a convenient life, it has made our lives more chaotic according to the reasons mentioned above.

can anyone help me with my conclusion? i couldnt come up with a great conclusion since i only have 30minutes to write this.
please help! :)

dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 17, 2014   #2
With newly developing technologies, people are able to carry various tasks more conveniently and easy.easily.

. For example, we no longer have to travel to DMV to renew our driver's license or drive to bank for sending money.

In the introduction you are not expected to cite any examples. The objective of the introduction is to introduce your issue topic to the reader and state your opinion about it.

Ancient people would probably think that we are like magicians.

I feel this is a bit overdone. Since TOEFL has a major bearing on time, stick to the most essential features of your essay structure that can help you earn a decent score :)
OP krnjeong 2 / 3  
Feb 17, 2014   #3
thank you very much!


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