The rapid pace of development in technology has changed the way people communicate with each other. The essay intends to explore the changes and the negative impact that may be brought out.
It's better if you state your opinion about this; do you think it is negative or positive?
Firstly, the prevalence of the Internet has
induced the invention ofintroduced online social networking platforms such as Facebook and Twitter
Better not make your sentences crowded with too complicated expressions
People nowadays spend a considerable amount of time surfing those websites and making comments on their friends' status, instead of talking with their friends face to face or even over telephone.
You better say that people nowadays choose these means to stay connected without making efforts to seeing each other physically. Don't forget that you need to keep a good alignment with your topic always :)