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Technology in food making. How have those inventions changed citizens life habits?


Pureness 1 / -  
Dec 8, 2017   #1
Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

delicious, tasty food



Over the pass few decades, together with the advantages of technologies are the change of human basic need. Individuals requirement for "delicious food", not just to "fullfill the hunger" like before. They want to have more tastes and invent new complex recipe. How are those invention chage citizen habit lifes? Let us discuss this trend in follow essay.

Just as mention before, customers appetites modern day more strictly than in the past, specialy for upper class who use to enjoy their meal in luxury restaurants. So, in order to satisfied their consumers, chiefs has to enhance their dishes more complex but within same amount of prepare time. This is where the latest modern equipment take part in, ingredients will be easier and faster to take care of with minimum affect it quality. This will give chiefs more time to focus on nutrition and savor the taste of their food.

Furthermore, technologies also help civilian make more qualities food with less time in their resident. They now will have more time to for entertaiment themselves such as pursue their hobbies or take care of their family. For students and researchers who use to stressful all the time, this really extremely improve of their life.

On the other hand, advance invention also lead to the growing of fast food industries, their restaurants pop-up everywhere just like mushrooms after the rain. Even this really convenient for those who dont have time to treat themselves home-made food, the increasingly of the concerns about obesity rate which is already pretty high western countries and many place in the world. Besides, the progress of frozen and defrost which is usually use for materials of food also destroy vitamin and nutritions, not to mention those food will be less tasty than fresh one.

In conclusion, indeed that the latest technologies improve the quality of individual lifes. Yet, people should have treat technologies as a supporter and not to dependent on it.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Dec 9, 2017   #2
Mylene, this is an essay that will fail on so many levels in an actual test due to to your unfamiliarity with the English language, the method of presenting English sentences, and the use of English vocabulary. Those are just the basic problems of your essay that does not even include that the coherence and cohesiveness of your paragraphs are so faulty, I almost felt like giving up on reading it and just slapping you with a failing grade. That said, I now have to give you an itemized scoring decision in order to show you how you can improve your work for your future practice tests.

Task Accuracy - 4 - your ideas are only partially respond to the task using difficult to understand positions and minimal detail. Since you did not provide the complete original prompt as required in this forum, I cannot assess the depth of your paraphrasing error. I however, am sure that the paraphrase is incorrect and incomplete because the discussion instruction is not properly represented in your opening paraphrase. Additionally, you have posed a question in the opening statement, which is almost an exact replica of the original question. Since you are not allowed to pose questions in the paraphrase, as that is to be given in a statement form, and you did not change the question in a significant manner, you will be scored even less by the actual examiner.

C & C - 4 - The ideas that you present are not clear enough to the reader. You lack the presentation of a coherent and cohesive paragraph because you somehow end up combining 2 mid sentences into one sentence instead of a completely presented sentence. This creates confusing presentations in the paragraphs on your part.

LR - 3 - - the essay abounds with misused English words such as "pass" (meaning to go through) instead of "past" (an event that has already happened), "chief" (meaning of highest rank or office) rather than the appropriate "chef" (trained professional cook), and other mistakes too numerous to mention here. There is a clear lack of understanding of English terms that results in a limited use of English vocabulary as well.

GRA - 4 - most of the sentences written are faulty due to the wrong term usage which ends up creating a comprehension problem for the reader. This results in a difficult to read essay that more often than not, fails to properly inform the reader.

Based on these mistakes, I have to sadly tell you that there is no way this type of writing can pass in an actual setting. However, if you continue to apply yourself in your lessons, read the dictionary in order to understand English word meanings, and try to practice English sentence development using free online sources or apps, you should begin to show improvement over time.
sfiza 17 / 28  
Dec 9, 2017   #3
@Pureness

Over the pass LAST few decades, together with the advantages of technologies are CAUSES the change of human basic need way of life .

Individuals requirement for "delicious food", delicious food not just to "fullfill fullfillthe hunger" like before. They... new complex modified recipe.
POOR INTRODUCTION,

Dear, Purenss
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