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Technology or social needs ? Which should get priority over the other?


angellin25 1 / -  
Jul 7, 2011   #1
Every governmental expenditure should be well counted before being made. Public money should be managed with the highest efficiency possible. Before planning the budget of a country all the needs should be prioritized.

In a developed country, buying computer technologies is of a great importance, taking into account the fact that there are lots of governmental bodies, among which should be made a qualitative connection. This facilitates much the bureaucratic activity. Thus, those who need to obtain any kind of permit can get it much faster than before implementing informational technologies. Computers are of a great help in the process of managing the governmental money flows. Any information can be easily accessed which save a lot of time for its users.

Nowadays computers are used in all the directions- beginning with medicine and finishing with commodities payments. The expenditures on computer technologies contribute much to the raise of the quality of services provided by the state.

In the same time, in the countries with low level of development buying a computer technology might be as important as in a developed country. It is vital to provide qualitative medical care as in developed country. It is important to provide good education, computers being a means to access a huge information database. In underdeveloped countries is still used the extensive agriculture, which greatly diminish the productivity. Using computer technologies might facilitate the transition to an intensive way of managing agricultural processes.

In this order of ideas, I think that investments made in computer technologies bring an added value to the whole economy of the country, contributing to the raising of the quality of life. The services offered might be of a greater variety, of a higher quality and of an increased efficiency.

Could you please give your appreciation of my essay.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jul 7, 2011   #2
Every governmental expenditure should be well thought out before being made.

This facilitates much of the bureaucratic activity.

Nowadays, computers are used in all areas - beginning with medicine and finishing with commodities payments.

At the same time, in the countries with low level of development,buying a computer technology might be as important as in a developed country.

It is vital to providing qualitative medical care as in developed countries .

It is important to provide good education, with computers being a means to access a huge information databases .

In underdeveloped countries is still used the extensive agriculture, which greatly diminish the productivity.---This sentence is confusing and incomplete, please revise for clarity.

Using computer technology might facilitate the transition to an intensive way of managing agricultural processes.

Here's all I could find to fix up. Good luck in school and have fun!
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