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Is technology (television, computers, cell phones, tablet devices, MP3 players) beneficial for child



Urie 1 / -  
Apr 6, 2024   #1
When do you believe kids should start using technology? With the increasing popularity of technology, children are exposed to social networks at younger and younger ages, some even below 5 years old. Although recognizing technological benefits in many aspects, there are a lot of disadvantages that can influence holistic and safe growth for those under 5 years old.

Firstly, screen time too much can make those under 5 years old become passive and timid. Under 5 years old is the age that kids should explore and be active outside your house. Spending too much time exploring technology can make those kids reduce their interest in outside activities, which may create barriers to connecting with everyone. The screen can create barriers also means that kids become timid when encountering anything in the outside world.

Secondly, using technology without parental guidance can make children encounter harmful content. With the expanding popularity of information technology, those under 5 years old can click on harmful content so easily. Sometimes, lack of parental carefulness is the reason kids are exposed to age-inappropriate content. Today's technology is too convenient, and kids easily approach trash and dangerous information.

Ultimately, the negative impact of technology on those under 5-year-old kids' health is the significant reason. Blue light from technology devices may lead to decreased eyesight in children. Entertainment beneficial in technology can make children reduce time to activate and connect to others. Technology can disrupt a child's sleep at night.

Some argue that the positive impacts of technology, such as entertainment, connecting with friends, and studying, can make children improve their independent ability and thinking when they are exposed to new knowledge through technology. Nevertheless, the downside of technology is crucial to interest in. It may lead to biased thinking in under 5-year-old kids, influence the way children shape their self-perception, reduce outside connection, and raise concerns about information safety.

Using technology can be beneficial if parents know how to limit screen time and select content for under 5 years old children, ensuring holistic development and safety for them. Kids should start when they are 12 years old. It is a time kids have the responsibility for what they do and want in their life.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15439  
Apr 13, 2024   #2
Is this essay meant for a task 2 practice essay? If it is, then you have overwritten the essay to the point where you will more than likely not complete the writing of this essay prompt during the actual test. You have written close to 400 words in this essay. An impossible feat during the actual test when you consider that you only have 40 minutes to properly develop your discussion for the topic provided.

There is a prompt separation in your restatement. Asking at what a child should start using gadgets is different from asking if using gadgets is beneficial to a child. Therefore, your prompt restatement will receive a failing score. You misunderstood the question so you did not correctly interpret it. Now, your discussion paragraphs may have merit. However, the fact that this would be an incompletely written essay during an actual test would mean that you would get a failing score for an open ended essay. You would not have enough time to conclude your discussion in the real setting.
akmaster101 4 / 6  
Apr 14, 2024   #3
Do not ramble and try to inflate the word count. It will only confuse the reader. Try to cut any unnecessary words/phrases and stay on topic.


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