Shon, I found some problems with the essay that need to be addressed. Let's see if we can get this more polished shall we? :-)
Technology has always played a leading role when it comes to students.
-... to students education
In fact, utilizing technologies is the ideal learning method because it helps and encourages students to study more and more in many ways.
- Learning through technology
is the ideal...
as a result of technologies, students are getting more and more knowledgeable, In fact, teachers now are the people who have to worry about themselves because , nowadays , students can easily surpass their master by utilizing technologies.
- Teachers now have to worry
these days' teachers should always be in touch with the current events. Moreover, leaning process has become a fun activity for many students due to technologies.
, for example, has an abundance of games and interactive rooms to entertain or to discuss about a definite topic.
People who desire
s to learn more than just the basis can use them to broaden their mind.
-... more than just the basics
Furthermore,, by using technologies you can
Shon, I have decided to let your writing style remain in order to help you understand why you need to improve your writing abilities. I hope you take note of the corrections I mentioned while you are revising this essay :-) You are showing some improvement already so keep it up :-)