Shon, I found some problems with the essay that need to be addressed. Let's see if we can get this more polished shall we? :-)
Technology has always played a leading role when it comes to students.
-... to students
education .
In fact, utilizingtechnologies is the ideal learning method because it helps and encourages students to study more and more in many ways.
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Learning through technology is the ideal...
Today, as a result of technologies, students are getting more and more knowledgeable,
In fact,teachers now are the people who have to worry about themselves because ,nowadays , students can easily surpass their master by utilizing technologies.
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Teachers now have to worry ...
Consequently,these days' teachers should always be in touch with the current events.
Moreover, leaning process has become a fun activity for many students due to technologies.
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The learning process...
The internet, for example, has an abundance of games and interactive rooms to entertain or to discuss about a definite topic.
People who desires to learn more than just the basis can use them to broaden their mind.
-... more than just the
basics ...
Furthermore,, by using technologies you can
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By using technologies...
Shon, I have decided to let your writing style remain in order to help you understand why you need to improve your writing abilities. I hope you take note of the corrections I mentioned while you are revising this essay :-) You are showing some improvement already so keep it up :-)