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(TED) What Islam Really Says About Women: Alaa Murabit


elasyari93 2 / 5  
Sep 22, 2016   #1
In globalized era, women's participation is still in questionable for all aspects due to their capabilities. In this TED's video, Alaa Murabit gives her perspective about women's roles in Islam. As a young Libyan Muslim woman, she really proud of her faith. She said that nowadays religious institutions are dominated by men and only driven by male leadership. So, where is women's dedication? In Islam, Khodijah is a woman's leader in politic, economic and military. From Alaa Murabit point of view, "why were not we learning about her? Why we are not equal in the eyes of men if we are equal in the eyes of God?" Women can take their participation in several aspects more than before. They are able to be a decision maker who involve in empowering the other women. They are a foundation while it is broken, we cannot built a strong power.
hanachi 3 / 9 2  
Sep 22, 2016   #2
hallo elasyari93 ,
your writing so interesting, i have corected, and i have suggestion

1. at this sentence: "As a young Libyan Muslim woman, she is really proud of her faith"

wish it useful, keep writing ^^
Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 22, 2016   #3
Hi elasyari
Letme give you some advice...

In globalized(globalization) era, women's participation isare still in questionable forin all aspects due to...
... gives her perspective about women's(women) roles in Islam.

They are a foundation while it is broken, we cannot(can) built a strong power.

Thank you and keep writing
David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 22, 2016   #4
Hallo,

There are several correction for you,

In globalizedglobalization era,.....
...As a young Libyan Muslim woman,...
...She said that nowadays religiousreligion institutions are dominated and led by men and only driven by male leadership ....
...From Alaa Murabit point of viewperspective , "why we were not we learning about her?..


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