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TED summary : a 12-year-old app developer


Jawa 11 / 17 1  
Sep 20, 2016   #1
TED Summary : Thomas Suarez

In digital era, everyone can easily access any information throughout the world included children and this leads societies to be more creative. Thomas Suarez, a 12 years old boy as an example, has successfully made a sophisticated app called "Bustin Jieber" for Iphone and android. His first idea, then, came from his friends who liked Justin Bieber. His attainment inspired most children in many countries and this brought him into becoming a speaker at TED.

In the light of this fact, some people thought and asked him how the way to make it as he is still a small child which is rarely done by his peer. With this app, it enables him to become a wealthy child since his app is sold at US 99 dollar and this will add more because many people from most countries buy this app with downloading from their smart phones. In the future, he will enhance his capability and creates more app for android.
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
Hi Jawa. What a nice summary writing, but here is an advice for you.

His first idea, then, camecomes from his friends who liked Justin Bieber. thought it is a fact, present tense must be used.

Best regard
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 21, 2016   #3
In digital era, everyone can easily access any information throughout ...

in this digital era, everyone, included children, can easily access..... that leads societies to be more creative

Thomas Suarez, a 12 years old boy as an example, has ...

For example, Thomas Suarez, a 12-year-old boy, has successfully invented a sophisticated app called ....
OR : ... has successfully invented a sophisticated app called ...., for example


His first idea, then, came from his friends ...

.... and asked him how the way to make it as he is still a small child whichwhile it is rarely done by his peer.

With this app, it enables him to become a wealthy child since his app ...

with this app, he has been able to become a wealthy child as his application is sold at US 99 dollar. the selling has thrived since many people from most countries buy it by downloading through their smartphones


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